Talk:Jennison Myrie-Williams/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: EchetusXe 08:31, 23 September 2011 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * See comments below.--EchetusXe 09:35, 23 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * See comments below.--EchetusXe 09:35, 23 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Yes.--EchetusXe 09:35, 23 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Yes.--EchetusXe 09:35, 23 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Yes.--EchetusXe 09:35, 23 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * No images.--EchetusXe 09:35, 23 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * On hold. Will pass after these minor issues listed below are solved.
 * Issues have been resolved, now is a good article!--EchetusXe 16:38, 23 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * I added the Soccerbase error message in the external links so that people don't think the article is wrong (it misses out 1 Bristol City appearance in the summary). I added his promotion with Bristol City to his honours section, you can tweak that if you want. I also changed the sentence for his international career. Changed a sentence in the Dundee United section. Made a few other minor changes as well.
 * Myrie Williams provided another assist when he was fouled in the area in a game against Port Vale, Chris Greenacre scoring the resulting penalty to give Tranmere the lead in an eventual 2–0 win.[39] - does that count as an assist? The source doesn't mention the word assist. You could change it or I could bring this up at WP:FOOTY to ask for other opinions if you like?
 * He scored his first competitive goal for Dundee United in a 3–2 home win against St Mirren on 5 December 2009, scoring Dundee United's third with a neat finish.[70] He was on the scoresheet again in January 2010, scoring Dundee United's third goal in a game against St Johnstone, Myrie-Williams' goal gave Dundee United the lead after trailing 2–0 at half-time, although the game ended 3–3.[71] Myrie-Williams received the first red card of his career when he was sent-off for two bookable offences in Dundee United's 2–0 home loss against Celtic on 25 April 2010.[72] He made 27 appearances for Dundee United in his first season at the club, scoring twice.[73] - you mention 'Dundee United' six times in four lines of text.
 * He remained at Dundee United ahead of the 2010–11 season, and made his first appearance of the season in a 1–1 draw with St Mirren on 14 August 2010, appearing as a substitute in the 74th minute.[74] It was to be Myrie-Williams' only appearance for Dundee United at the start of the campaign,[75] and four days later, on 18 August, Dundee United manager Peter Houston told the player he was available for transfer in order to cut Dundee United's wage bill.[76][77] Shortly before the summer transfer window closed, on 31 August 2010, Myrie-Williams left Dundee United by mutual consent - you mention 'Dundee United' five times in less than four lines of text. How about adding some variety by using club nicknames i.e. the "Terrors", the "Tangerines". Could so the same in other sections.
 * Former footballer turned pundit Steve Claridge believes that Myrie-Williams is "an exciting prospect" due to his style of play. - he said that in June 2009, and when Myre-Williams is retired he won't think he is a great prospect. How about dating the assessment? All the other analysis can ring true throughout his career, but he won't be a great prospect forever.
 * He was born in Lambeth, south London.[3] - the source you use states his POB as Bristol.
 * This ref link isn't working. It shows up in the BBC's search page so that is very odd. It may reappear in time.