Talk:Jerk De Soleil/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: Pedro J.  the rookie 23:59, 12 November 2009 (UTC)

Okay P&F lets see....

Prose
 * Dose it really have to say his stepbrother?
 * Yes, because it gives context to the user.  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)


 * It would be better if it would be something like Phineas, his stepbrother Ferb, and their friends Isabella, Baljeet, Buford, and Django have Plans to go to the cirq but are ruined by ....
 * I'm favorable of the current status, but if you feel strongly about it I can change it.  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)


 * Cirque do you mean circus?
 * Nope, they refer to it as a cirque, a French circus. I changed the link to circus though.  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)


 * This one is a comment i do not now if you have to say who perry is i mean if some one is going to read it they must be familiared with the show.
 * We can't assume the reader is familiar with the subject; therefore, giving context to the reader is required.  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)


 * Dr Heinz Doofenshmirtz. Doofenshmirtz  can you change it so that the name is not next to the other.
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)


 * remove high from world high.
 * Check again, it says "everyone in the world high, squeaky voices," referring to high, squeaky voices.  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)


 * Same thing with jermy as with Perry
 * Like I said, gotta give context to the reader...  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)


 * gives candace not give
 * No-no, it still grammatically accurate, I'm pretty sure.  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)


 * What those don mean
 * Don is a synonym for "to put on."  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)

Thats all.-- Pedro J. the rookie 23:59, 12 November 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. :)  The Flash  {talk} 00:26, 13 November 2009 (UTC)

PASS..CONGRATS-- Pedro J. the rookie 00:32, 13 November 2009 (UTC)