Talk:Jerome Daugherty/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:45, 12 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments Mainly niff-naff and trivia, so I'll put it on hold while we cover those off, but as always, a good piece of work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:38, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I think if you link "humanities" as a subject, you probably ought to link "rhetoric" as well because many people reading won't really get that.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:41, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "his leadership of Georgetown University for four years" -> "his four-year leadership of Georgetown University"?
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:42, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "on March 25, 1849 in" comma after 1849.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:42, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "in Baltimore, Maryland to " comma after Maryland.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:42, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Rose a Wivel" really?
 * Done. Typo.  Ergo Sum  12:43, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "in Frederick, Maryland in" comma after Maryland.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:43, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "in Washington, D.C. to" I know this sounds boring... comma after D.C.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:44, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "teaching, now in Latin and Ancient Greek." did he teach in those languages or teach those languages?
 * Rephrased.  Ergo Sum  12:45, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I know this is subjective, but you link "mathematics" but not "theology", and I would think the former is more well-known than the latter...
 * Linked theology.  Ergo Sum  12:45, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "tertianship" technical term, does it have a suitable link?
 * The most suitable link would be Jesuit formation, which is linked a few words later.  Ergo Sum  12:46, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "of treasurer and professor of mathematics" I know it's unlikely, but reversing those would mean no-one could get confused about a possible position of "treasure of mathematics"...
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:46, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * " in Worcester, Massachusetts as" comma after Mass.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:46, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Succeeding John D. Whitney..." the whole para goes without mentioning Daugherty by name, a rule of thumb for me is to mention (in a bio) the name on either first or second possibility (but mixing it up from para to para...).
 * Fixed.  Ergo Sum  12:48, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "of the Dental School" is that the formal name, it doesn't appear to be, so I'm not sure about capitalising it...
 * Rephrased.  Ergo Sum  12:47, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "opened in Washington, D.C. in " comma after D.C.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  12:48, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "detracting from those of Catholic University resulted in the" I think this needs work, I can't quite parse it, a new sentence needed in there perhaps?
 * Rephrased. Should be clearer.  Ergo Sum  12:50, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * What is operarius?
 * Added an explanation.  Ergo Sum  12:59, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review. I believe I've addressed all your concerns.  Ergo Sum  13:00, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
 * No problem. Looks good to me, so I'm happy to pass.  Cheers, The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:40, 13 September 2019 (UTC)