Talk:Jerry's Painting/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 21:05, 5 May 2011 (UTC)

Will review this tomorrow. Queenieacoustic (talk) 21:05, 5 May 2011 (UTC)

Plot

 * ...while thinking of about powerful women... Drop "of" or "about".
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)

Production

 * "Jerry's Painting" was written by Norm Hiscock and directed by Dean Holland. During its original broadcast, "Jerry's Painting" ran for... Start the second sentence with "the episode" instead.
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "Jerry's Painting" featured a guest appearance by Darlene Hunt as Marcia Langman, a member of the conservative group, the Society for Family Stability Foundation. Drop the second comma.
 * Dropped it. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Remember to write (pictured) after the name of the person in the picture.
 * Added. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)

Cultural references

 * ...Andy and April instead start to purchase several "as seen on TV", including... Looks like a noun is missing after "as seen on TV", unless that is the noun?
 * Nope, you're right. Added "items". —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)

Reception

 * You should probably explain what the "ratings" and "shares" mean, for those who are not familiar with Nielsen ratings.
 * Added. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Why Leslie Knope mentioned by full name in the middle of the section?
 * Not sure. Dropped the last name. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)

Lead

 * ""Jerry's Painting" is the eleventh episode of the third season of the American comedy television series Parks and Recreation..." Write "Parks and Recreation ' s third season" instead.
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)

With not much at all to complain about, this is overall a very well-written article. Just fix said issues and we've got ourselves another GA. I'll put it on hold for seven days so that the changes can be made. Queenieacoustic (talk) 09:08, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! Much appreciated! —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Well done! Queenieacoustic (talk) 14:53, 6 May 2011 (UTC)