Talk:Jesper Fast/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 15:54, 19 January 2015 (UTC)


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * see lede comments below
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for 7 days for concerns to be addressed.  ΤheQ Editor   Talk? 23:00, 27 January 2015 (UTC)
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for 7 days for concerns to be addressed.  ΤheQ Editor   Talk? 23:00, 27 January 2015 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for 7 days for concerns to be addressed.  ΤheQ Editor   Talk? 23:00, 27 January 2015 (UTC)

Well Written

 * There should be a non-breaking space -  between a number and the unit of measurement.
 * Are you referring to the references to weight (like 20 pounds)? I've added it to those. Or would this also apply to such things as number of goals, assists, points, etc.? Let me know and I can add them wherever necessary. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * "In 2009–10, Fast recorded 49 points (23 goals, 26 assists), SuperElit" - this sentence doesn't make sense.
 * I think it did, actually, but I added "which were" to clarify further. :) —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * Link to Rinkens riddare
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * "he injured he knee" - should be "he injured his knee"
 * Fixed. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * "who play in Sweden" - should be "who plays in Sweden"
 * Are you sure about that? It refers to two people, not one. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * "teammates like Tanner Glass" - who else noted his ability to make responsible decisions and skillful plays?
 * I'm not sure I understand your questions? —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm not very familiar with the citation format, but why does every reference contain the "|archiveurl=" parameter?
 * In just about every article I edit, I use WebCite to created an archived version of the article. That way in the future, if the original website for the source were to disappear (WP:LINKROT) there will be a backup archived version. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * "exceeded most observers' expectations" - I don't see a FN which cites that
 * The Swedish language source in the next citation that follows the next sentence makes multiple references to Fast exceeding expectations in that season. I didn't think an inline citation at the end of that sentence was necessary because I thought the citation at the end of the last sentence covered it, but I added it to both sentences to clarify. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * The lead should be expanded a little.
 * I've expanded the lead, let me know if you think it's good now. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

Broad in Coverage

 * The first two sentences in Junior Career doesn't belong in that section.
 * This might be a little WP:IAR, but I think it should stay here. It obviously belongs in the article, but probably belongs in an "Early life" section or something like that. But I think it would be sort of ridiculous to make such a section for only two sentences. But that being said, if that's the solution required for this GAN to pass, I'll do it. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
 * "who play in Sweden" - mentioning the league would be helpful
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

Images

 * Include a caption for the image in the infobox
 * There actually already was a caption written in the infobox, but it wasn't showing up because it was mistakenly written as "image_caption" rather than just "caption." That's fixed now. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

Overall

 * . I don't actually know about five in Well Written section, and I was referring to an older revision of the page for six in the Well Writen section. I've had one more read through for the lead. Passing the article. Congrats!  ΤheQ Editor   Talk? 15:11, 28 January 2015 (UTC)