Talk:Jesus College Boat Club (Oxford)/GA1

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I plan on reviewing this article. Oh yes. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:31, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments A great article. All these are virtually trivial. Fix 'em (or discuss 'em with me) and I'll GA-it. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:20, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * So, you have "the Isis" in the lead and "The Isis" in the infobox - the article about that part of the river seems to be The Isis - just a minor point on consistency.
 * Well, I was starting a sentence fragment with a capital letter... have reworded
 * Can you, in the infobox, have Official website instead of just http://home.jesus.ox.ac.uk/soc/jcbc/ ?
 * Yes
 * Is Barney the most prominent rower to appear for JCBC?
 * The only one with an article about him as a rower, anyway, but no source says he's the most prominent / the only Olympian.
 * Last sentence of the lead feels a little orphaned...
 * Expanded
 * "..references to the college..." - do you mean references to the boat club? I'm not sure you should use the two phrases interchangeably for fear of ostracising non-Oxbridgrians.
 * Well, for that first one, the references are to a boat from the college rather than a formally-constituted club. I don't think that using place and club interchangeably is too confusing in the context of an article about the club e.g. football articles such as Ipswich Town F.C. (to pick a team at random!) will refer to Ipswich and the reader knows that the club is being referred to, unless the context appears otherwise. I've changed many of them, though.
 * "which was a race between an eight from Jesus College and an eight from Brasenose College" - "a race between eights from Jesus College and Brasenose College" might be more efficient?
 * Indeed
 * "There were few rowers at this time and races between fours (boats with four oarsmen and a coxswain) attracted more interest than races between eights at this time." - "at this time" x 2...
 * Zapped
 * Probably could do better than repeating Tam o'shanters in such quick succession.
 * Indeed
 * It may not be clear to the non-expert that a bump would require the bumped boat to concede the race?
 * Sentence added
 * Torpids, Eton and bump is linked twice in the History section.
 * No more
 * "division of Eights" - this is the first time Eights has been capitalised - why?
 * Changed to Eights Week - the competition is usually known as Eights, taking place in Eights Week, in which eights race each other.
 * Perhaps my 'tab-like ignorance (I didn't read English...), but is "vieing" English? "vying" seems to crop up more frequently...
 * Whoops
 * You've linked shilling and pence, I'd link £ too for non-Brits.
 * Linked


 * Thanks! BencherliteTalk 09:21, 13 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Great work. Promoting now.  The Rambling Man (talk) 17:07, 14 September 2008 (UTC)