Talk:Jews Don't Count/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 18:28, 25 August 2023 (UTC)

Comments
I'll have a go at this one. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:28, 25 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Thanks a lot! 19:12, 25 August 2023 (UTC)

It reads pretty well. I've fixed a couple of minor issues in the text; a few more are listed below.


 * Lead


 * "differently than" => "differently from", since this is British English.


 * "by Jewish and Israeli press" => "by the Jewish ...", as above.

Done - F

Done - F
 * Background


 * An excellent section, very helpful.

Thanks! - F


 * Synopsis


 * "differently to" => "differently from", as above.


 * "the literary ... industries". Is "literary" an "industry" like "film" or "steel"? Don't think so.
 * OK, tentatively replaced with "literary ecosystem". - F


 * "the prerogative term 'Yid'"? Perhaps "derogatory" is intended? Same again further down.
 * Silly me, I meant to write "pejorative"! Fixed. - F


 * "non-Jewish actors being cast to play Jewish roles show that" => "the casting of non-Jewish actors to play Jewish roles shows that".


 * "explores Jewish actors hiding" => "explores how Jewish actors hide".


 * Wikilink Zionism.


 * "Publication and reception" --- odd bedfellows; the usual rule for headings is "just one subject", so the word "and" is a small warning flag. I suggest that since the first paragraph takes care of "Publication", we make that a separate section. "Reception" can then begin with the second paragraph.


 * Sarah Annes Brown is not just redlinked on English Wiki, but absent from all other Wikis, so the "Wikidata" link isn't terribly helpful (and I'd say it was anomalous, really). Best ditch it.


 * "referring to it a 'mini masterpiece" => "calling it a 'mini...'"


 * " criticising that Baddiel 'ducks the challenge'" => "stating that..."

Done others - F


 * Documentary adaptation


 * Suggest renaming the subsection "Reception" to "Reception of documentary" so we don't have two sections with the same name.

Done - F

Images

 * Images all properly licensed on Commons, and all seem reasonably relevant.

Summary
This is a lively and interesting review that gives a good idea of its subject and how it was received. I've made only a few minor comments and hope to see this as a GA soon. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:26, 25 August 2023 (UTC)