Talk:Jill Valentine/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:02, 18 January 2015 (UTC)

I will have this completed by tomorrow at the latest ☯ Jag  uar  ☯ 17:02, 18 January 2015 (UTC)
 * I am sorry for the delay; real life stuff has got in the way lately. I promise to finish this tomorrow morning ☯ Jag  uar  ☯ 23:47, 19 January 2015 (UTC)


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

 * "During the events of Resident Evil 3: Nemesis, Resident Evil: The Umbrella Chronicles, Resident Evil 5 and Resident Evil: Revelations, she escapes from a city overrun by zombies" - this makes it sound like all of those games have the same plot - that she escapes from a city overrun by zombies? Is this true?
 * I haven't played all of those games, but I know it isn't true for Resident Evil 5 at least, i'm rewording this. Thanks for noticing. Freikorp (talk) 23:28, 20 January 2015 (UTC)


 * The lead could summarise the article a little better. For example the opening of the second paragraph could be expanded a little on what the critics thought of her character?
 * I found this a bit difficult; is it any better now? Freikorp (talk) 02:46, 21 January 2015 (UTC)


 * "are deployed to investigate a series of bizarre murders in the Arklay Mountains" - is this a fictionalised location?
 * Yes, clarified this in prose. Freikorp (talk) 23:15, 20 January 2015 (UTC)


 * "She is also the sole protagonist in Resident Evil: Genesis (2008), an alternative-story version of this game" - shouldn't this be in chronological order? A jump from 1996 to 2008 seems confusing as the next paragraph opens with Resident Evil 3: Nemesis, a 1999 game
 * Done. Freikorp (talk) 23:19, 20 January 2015 (UTC)


 * "a member of the Umbrella Corporation's paramilitary force double-crossed by their employer" - how about betrayed?
 * Done. Freikorp (talk) 23:19, 20 January 2015 (UTC)


 * "Jill Valentine has been received favorably as the Resident Evil series' main female protagonist and remains one of its most recognisable characters" - by who? Critics?
 * Clarified by critics. Freikorp (talk) 23:28, 20 January 2015 (UTC)


 * "A cheesy "You were almost a Jill sandwich" line" - not very encyclopaedic!
 * Fair enough, reworded. Freikorp (talk) 23:15, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

On hold
Just a few prose issues and some more issues with the references that will need sorting out before this could meet the GA criteria. There is a invalid YouTube source left in and a couple that are missing a few details, but other than that the references have improved by leaps and bound since the previous GAN. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days until they can be addressed. Thanks! ☯ Jag  uar  ☯ 15:16, 20 January 2015 (UTC)


 * I've attempted to address everything :) Freikorp (talk) 02:46, 21 January 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks, looks like we're ready for GA now. I'm feeling lazy and won't create a level 3 header, so I'll just promote this as it meets the criteria ☯  Jag  uar  ☯ 14:46, 21 January 2015 (UTC)