Talk:Jim Moran/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: –– Jezhotwells (talk) 14:23, 10 April 2010 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Checking against GA criteria

 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * Dicks ceded his chairmanship of Moran's subcommittee to replace the recently deceased John Murtha as the chair of the Defense Appropriations Subcommittee. Can this be re-written? As it stands it is confusing as the committee wasn't "Moran's" when Dicks ceded the chairanship, it was Dicks'. ✅ I rewrote it. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 15:23, 11 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Moran's support for harsher bankruptcy law provisions and sponsorship of harsher bankruptcy legislation brought allegations in 2002 that his support came in return for financial favors by financial institutions which could benefit from such laws. two close uses of "harsher". Can you find another word for one of the instances? ✅
 * In January 1998, one month before he introduced the legislation, credit card bank MBNA advocated that would restrict the ability of consumer debtors to declare bankruptcy. Better to say "... MBNA advocated that it would restrict ..." ✅
 * Moran received a favorable debt consolidation loan from MBNA that allowed him to personally avoid bankruptcy due to credit card and stock market losses. Better would be "... that allowed him to avoid personal bankruptcy arising from credit card and stock market losses." ✅
 * Moran voted for the Affordable Health Care for America Act, which passed on November 7, 2009; saying about the bill on his website that "The cost of doing nothing is simply too high for the American people to carry who today pay more than twice what people everywhere else on earth pay but yet live no longer nor healthier lives." Why is this quote italicised? ✅
 * ' '... he has expressed support for Public Education system, universal pre-Kindergarten...'' Why is Kindergarten Capitalised? ✅
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * I fixed some links to WP:Disambiguations with this edit. Please check that I got the right targets.
 * I tagged one dead link, ref #8 . ✅
 * I added a format note to ref #24 as this video is only available in the US. I assume good faith for the content.
 * ref #4 needs properly formatting with publication date, and author. Consistent formatting is needed with publisher details, author and date if available. refs #6, 7, 8, 12, 15, 33, 37, 38, 41, 42, 43, 44, 46, 51, 52 need looking at for this issue. ✅ I fixed several that you missed.
 * All references appear to be to reliable sources, and support the cited statements.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * The article is broad and well focussed apart from Moran currently lives in a house overlooking the Potomac River in Arlington, Virginia. The house was previously owned by Najeeb Halaby, the father of Queen Noor, who was the fourth wife and widow of King Hussein of Jordan. Is the bit about the previous ownership of the house useful encyclopaedic information? I won't make this a deal-breaker, but it may be challenged by others, and would certainly be contested at WP:FAC if you took it there.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * I added a caption to the infobox image
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * This is nearly there. Please address the issues raised above and respond on this page, which I have watchlisted. On hold for seven days. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 16:09, 10 April 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, a few issues left. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 15:23, 11 April 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, thanks for your hard work. I am happy to list this as a good article. Congratulations! –– Jezhotwells (talk) 21:30, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
 * About your point on the history of Moran's house: I think it is a notable part of the subject's personal life that they own a house formerly occupied by Georgian royalty. It certainly is open for debate, however. I just won't be the one to remove it. ~BLM Platinum (talk) 19:55, 10 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, he wasn't Georgian (or even Jordanian), he was an American of Syrian ancestry, and he wasn't nobility - you don't acquire that through step-relations - but I won't make it an issue. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 15:23, 11 April 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, thanks for your hard work. I am happy to list this as a good article. Congratulations! –– Jezhotwells (talk) 21:30, 12 April 2010 (UTC)
 * About your point on the history of Moran's house: I think it is a notable part of the subject's personal life that they own a house formerly occupied by Georgian royalty. It certainly is open for debate, however. I just won't be the one to remove it. ~BLM Platinum (talk) 19:55, 10 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, he wasn't Georgian (or even Jordanian), he was an American of Syrian ancestry, and he wasn't nobility - you don't acquire that through step-relations - but I won't make it an issue. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 15:23, 11 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, he wasn't Georgian (or even Jordanian), he was an American of Syrian ancestry, and he wasn't nobility - you don't acquire that through step-relations - but I won't make it an issue. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 15:23, 11 April 2010 (UTC)