Talk:Joaquín Gutiérrez/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 13:58, 19 October 2014 (UTC)

Since this is one of the five oldest articles in the queue, I'll give reviewing this a shot. Wizardman 13:58, 19 October 2014 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:
 * The lead needs to be expanded; as is it doesn't summarize the article much, if at all.
 * The citation needed tags need to be addressed.
 * The link for the infobox image doesn't work, and going to the flickr artist's profile doesn't show anything close to the image. Even if it was there it's using a pre-1923 tag despite showing the year as 1940. The other image is fine.
 * The early life section feels a little disjointed, partially because of how much it seemed that he did. Try and see if you make his different accomplishments and the like flow better.
 * "Shortly thereafter, Gutiérrez traveled to Chile." after when? the previous sentence started with "for a time", so the chronology here is blurry.
 * Try and replace uses of "even", as it pops up a bit too much and hurts the text quality.
 * "In 1972, when Augusto Pinochet deposed and began a military dictatorship," missing a word.
 * A bit odd that Hamlet doesn't have a translation year when the others do.

I'll place the article on hold for a week, then do another read through, since the prose feels disjointed at times, and it may take me another look to find the rest of the issues. Wizardman 01:50, 24 October 2014 (UTC)
 * After a week+ I haven't heard anything and no progress has been made, so I'm closing this as a failed GA. Wizardman  00:14, 4 November 2014 (UTC)