Talk:Joel Edmundson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 00:57, 1 June 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  00:57, 1 June 2020 (UTC)


 * "2008-09 and 2009-10" Dashes needed. ✅
 * "Micheal Ferland" is apparently his name, not a misspelling.
 * LOL ok. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 16:38, 4 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Although" WP:EDITORIAL.✅
 * "The Warriors assistant Coach" Lowercase for coach? ✅
 * There's a bit you can add from his year in Kalamazoo.✅
 * "long term injury reserve" Maybe just link injured reserve and remove the long term part, since that is already implied.✅
 * "the teams protected list" Apostrophe needed.✅
 * "However" Again, editorializing.✅
 * Colton Parayko needs a link.
 * I link it earlier in the sentence "Alongside fellow rookie Colton Parayko"
 * "on a one year $3 million contract" Comma after year.✅
 * "Edmundson helped the Blues qualify for the 2019 Stanley Cup Final against the Boston Bruins and played in five out of the seven games of the series to help the Blues clinch their first Stanley Cup in franchise history." Comma(s) somewhere in this sentence needed.✅
 * The central time part doesn't seem necessary unless you plan on quoting his whole thing.✅
 * "In spite of" Again.✅

That should be it. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  07:58, 4 June 2020 (UTC)