Talk:John Berry (ambassador)/GA1

GA Review
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 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * Could the lead be a bit longer. I find it very short at present. For instance, mention both alma mater, and perhaps that he is gay (not that it really is important, but there seems to have been "criticism" from "conservatives" for his sexual alignment, but I'll leave this to your discretion).
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * The article is somewhat short for a person with so much influence. However, I understand it is difficult to cover the early career of a public administrator. I am assuming good faith that news sources have been exhausted to cover his career.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I am placing on hold until a slightly longer lead has been written, say 50% or so. Otherwise well-written and interesting article. Arsenikk (talk)  10:32, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I am placing on hold until a slightly longer lead has been written, say 50% or so. Otherwise well-written and interesting article. Arsenikk (talk)  10:32, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
 * I am placing on hold until a slightly longer lead has been written, say 50% or so. Otherwise well-written and interesting article. Arsenikk (talk)  10:32, 19 May 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, I rewrote the lead. Is it okay the way it's now? Hekerui (talk) 14:10, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Good work! I will pass the article. However, I just wanted to clarify one thing (I assume good faith you with correct it if it is misleading). Under the gay discussion, it says: "in any administration."—is this referring to only the US, or also other countries? As I read it, is seems to read the whole world, but the lead suggests only the US. The reason I ask is in part that I know that Norwegian previously had a gay Minister of Finance (generally regarded as the second-highest political seat in the government). Arsenikk (talk)  14:50, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Clarified. Hekerui (talk) 15:13, 19 May 2009 (UTC)