Talk:John J. DeGioia/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:04, 2 March 2021 (UTC)


 * We've got 4 straight sentences in the Early life section that all start with "He"; can this be varied some?
 * Broke it up.  Ergo Sum  03:50, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "John Joseph DeGioia was born in 1957" - Where is this in the source? I couldn't find it when I checked it, but I may have missed it.
 * It's in the second ref. I've rephrased the sentence to make it clearer.  Ergo Sum  04:15, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "He was criticized by Catholics for allowing the formation of a" - DeGioia or O'Donavan?
 * Clarified.  Ergo Sum  03:54, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "O'Donovan, named DeGioia associate vice president and chief administrative officer of Georgetown's main campus in 1992" - I don't think that comma should be there
 * Fixed.  Ergo Sum  03:54, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " He has taught undergraduates at the university as a professor of philosophy since that time" - Even as president?
 * Yes.  Ergo Sum  03:56, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Upon assuming office, he oversaw the successful completion of a $1 billion fundraising campaign (equivalent to $1.4 billion in 2019),[10] which the board of directors had begun in 1995" - Not seeing the completion part in the source
 * Added a ref to support it.  Ergo Sum  04:00, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Is it worth mentioning that he was selected because no suitable Jesuit could be found per the NYT ref 11?
 * Added.  Ergo Sum  04:24, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "A number of constructions project were undertaken during DeGioia's presidenc" - Since he's still active president, maybe "have been" not "were"
 * Touche. Fixed.  Ergo Sum  04:02, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Did anything come of the Blatty lawsuit?
 * I have not been able to find any substantive developments on it.  Ergo Sum  04:13, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " In 2016, he convened a systemic study of and apology for the university's 19th-century connection to slavery" - The subject is DeGioia, but given that the subject of the previous sentence is Blatty, it's possible to read "he" as referring to Blatty, not DeGioia.
 * Clarified.  Ergo Sum  04:14, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Sacred Heart University in 2011, and Mount Aloysius College in 2015, and Seattle University in 2016" - Nix the "and" before Mount Aloysius
 * Fixed.  Ergo Sum  04:14, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * There's a category for Italian descent, but I'm not seeing where Italian descent is specifically mentioned or cited in the body
 * His surname suggests Italian ancestry, but more directly, he received an award from Order Sons of Italy, and such awards are given to Italian Americans.  Ergo Sum  04:18, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks like he probably has a child, is this worth mentioning?
 * I hesitate a bit only because of WP:NPF. Not sure it's terribly relevant either.  Ergo Sum  04:21, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Sources look reliable, and the image licensing is fine. I did an internet search to make sure this was fully up-to-date, and I didn't find anything that suggested significant ommissions were present.

Good work, placing on hold. Hog Farm Talk 16:21, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you, .  Ergo Sum  04:24, 4 March 2021 (UTC)