Talk:John Komnenos (Domestic of the Schools)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 3family6 (talk · contribs) 17:13, 4 December 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * Mostly clear and readable, a copyvio check found nothing. However, this sentence "..and was raised by his victorious brother to the rank of kouropalates and appointed him as Domestic of the Schools of the West.[3]" should be re-written as "...and his victorious brother raised him to the rank of kouropalates and also appointed him as Domestic of the Schools of the West.[3]" The other doesn't work grammatically.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Done.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 17:35, 14 December 2014 (UTC)


 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * Follows the guidelines.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * Appropriate reference section, which follows a consistent standard.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * B. Citations to reliable sources:
 * I'm accepting the offline source AGF, as well as the two foreign language sources. Well cited, except for this sentence, "The crown then passed to Constantine X Doukas (r. 1059–67), although Bryennios asserts that it was first offered to John, who refused it, despite the pressure of his wife, Anna Dalassene, to accept.", which needs a citation, as well as this sentence, "Anna became involved in conspiracies against the Doukas family, whom she never forgave for taking the throne in 1059.", which also needs a citation.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Done.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 18:28, 14 December 2014 (UTC)


 * C. No original research:
 * All content is verifiable.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * All major aspects covered.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * B. Focused:
 * Stays focused on subject.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * No bias, fair representation.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * Highly stable, single-author.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * Images are public domain, I fixed one tag to indicate that it is PD in the US.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * Useful with appropriate captions.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall: Almost there, just a few minor issues.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 21:02, 13 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Pass or Fail:
 * I rewrote the problematic sentence. On the "missing" citations, in both cases the fact is cited by the next citation in each case (#7 and #11 respectively). I don't usually reference on a sentence-by-sentence basis. Once again, thanks for taking the time. Constantine  ✍  11:35, 14 December 2014 (UTC)
 * With citation #11, it isn't that major a deal, since the next sentence is still dealing with the same issue (the activities of Anna). I just wanted to make sure that citation 11 supports it. The first case, however, needs a citation, because it is directly summarizing a statement by Bryennios.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 17:35, 14 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Fair enough. Done. Constantine  ✍  17:52, 14 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Okay. Passed.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 18:28, 14 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Okay. Passed.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 18:28, 14 December 2014 (UTC)