Talk:John Komnenos (governor of Dyrrhachium)/GA1

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 17:42, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

I'll have a look at this one. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:42, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Infobox: "after 1136"; "doux". Items in infoboxes should have uppercase initial letters. (Although this is not a GAN requirement.)
 * Done.
 * "long-time governor (doux) of the strategically important city and theme of Dyrrhachium from 1091 to c. 1106." To state "long-time" ''and## give the dates seems redundant.
 * Good point, removed.
 * Reference 10. Optional: Consider turning this into a footnote.
 * I am a bit ambivalent about this, since it is a minor footnote. I dislike adding extra sections for so little...
 * "a German princess to the Holy Roman Emperor". This doesn't really make sense to me. What is "to" trying to communicate?
 * Clarified.
 * "Soon after the assumption of his duties, however, he was accused by Theophylact of Bulgaria of plotting against the Emperor." Could Theophylact be introduced? Does "of Bulgaria" indicate that he (or she) was the Bulgarian monarch, or merely from Bulgaria?
 * Gah, I can't believe I missed this. He was the Archbishop "of Bulgaria" (Archbishop of Ohrid), added the relevant title and link.


 * "John allowed himself to become involved in prolonged negotiations with the Serbian ruler, giving him valuable time to prepare his forces." It is not immediately clear who "him" refers to. On first reading I assumed that it was John.
 * Clarified.
 * "but was not relieved of his post." Phrasing this as a negative reads a little oddly to me. Optional, 'but he was again confirmed in his post'?
 * Hmmm, for me the other way reads oddly: when you mess up, you expect to be dismissed. Being "again confirmed" seems counter-intuitive to me.
 * "whose fleet had shipwrecked". Insert 'been'.
 * Done.
 * "Anna Komnene": introduce her, and possibly the Alexiad.
 * Good point, done.
 * "defeated in a campaign against the Dalmatians". Do we have any further details of the campaign or the defeat?
 * Not really, unfortunately. The Alexiad is very brief here.
 * Introduce Bohemond.
 * Done.
 * "Alexios I's empress Irene Doukaina." Either upper case E, or a comma after "empress".
 * Done.
 * "which therefore is also a terminus post quem". As this is the English language Wikipedia I dislike using foreign language terms to explain things, even if Wikilinked. I dislike it even more when there is no in line translation. This may just be me.
 * Hmmm, while I generally agree, this is a technical term that is common in English historiography. I have changed this to make it more comprehensible, however.

Gog the Mild (talk) 17:31, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for having a look at this, Gog the Mild. Your points have been addressed. Anything else? Constantine  ✍  16:36, 20 October 2020 (UTC)