Talk:John Noble MacKenzie/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 06:59, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this one shortly. Harrias talk 06:59, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

Images

 * Only one image is used, which is appropriately licensed and captioned. Consider adding alt text, but it is not a GA requirement.
 * Maybe consider adding another image in somewhere, possibly of one of the types of aircraft he flew? No requirement, just a consideration.
 * Added an image to the Singapore section. Zawed (talk) 11:03, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * New image is also appropriately licensed and captioned. (No action needed.) Harrias  talk 12:32, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * Wikilink British Malaya in the lead; it isn't commonly known.
 * Wikilink Thomas MacKenzie.
 * Wikilink, and correct the grammar in Timaru Boys' High School and Otago Boys' High School.
 * Wikilink No. 9 Flying Training School RAF.
 * Wikilink Deal, Kent, assuming that is the right location?
 * All the above links done. Zawed (talk) 10:47, 18 September 2020 (UTC)


 * "claimed a Ju 88 as a probable" This need a bit more clarification, maybe as a footnote, just to make clear to a layperson what is meant by "a probable".
 * I've rephrased this, what do you think? Zawed (talk) 10:47, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * I think that helps, thanks. Harrias  talk 12:32, 18 September 2020 (UTC)


 * "Two more Bf 1092.." Is this a typo, should it be 109s.
 * Fixed. Zawed (talk) 10:47, 18 September 2020 (UTC)


 * "..as the Luftwaffe began resumed attacking convoys.." Too many words here I think.
 * Surplus word removed. Zawed (talk) 10:47, 18 September 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink British Malaya again in the Singapore section.
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:47, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

Overall a very nice and tidy piece of work, well done. I'll stick this on hold. Harrias talk 09:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC)


 * thanks for the review, I have actioned most points and responded to others above. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 11:32, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * All good, I'm happy to pass this now, nice work. Harrias  talk 12:32, 18 September 2020 (UTC)