Talk:John Plagis/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 21:02, 20 September 2013 (UTC)

Progression

 * Version of the article when originally reviewed:
 * Version of the article when review was closed:

Technical review

 * Citations: The Citation Check tool reveals one error with reference consolidation:
 * lg031144 (Multiple references are using the same name)
 * Disambiguations: one dab link :
 * Wing Commander
 * Linkrot: external links check out (no action req'd).
 * Alt text: Images all lack alt text so you might consider adding it (not a GA req'ment - suggestion only).
 * Copyright violations: The Earwig Tool reveals no issues with copyright violations or close paraphrasing (no action req'd).
 * Duplicate links: one duplicate link:
 * flight lieutenant
 * all OK —Cliftonian (talk) 17:52, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

Criteria

 * It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * The lead is a little repetitive. Probably no requirement to state that he won 11 victories over Malta twice in two separate paragraphs. Perhaps remove one instance?
 * OK —Cliftonian (talk) 17:52, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Redundant language here: "After he and the squadron converted to flying Mustang IIIs, he commanded a wing of Mustangs based at RAF Bentwaters that supported bombing missions....", consider instead: "After converting to flying Mustang IIIs, he commanded a wing based at RAF Bentwaters that supported bombing missions."
 * OK —Cliftonian (talk)</b></b> 17:52, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
 * "With Malta looking increasingly precarious...", consider instead "With the defence of Malta looking increasingly precarious..."
 * "The Luftwaffe launched a major attack against the key Maltese airfields...", consider instead "The Luftwaffe launched a major attack against key Maltese airfields..."
 * Redundant language here: "Plagis was promoted to flight lieutenant on 4 June 1942 and concurrently transferred to No. 185 Squadron to command "B" Flight." Consider removing "concurrently".
 * Further repetition in the body of the article IRT to his number of victories. "...his tally for the war was recorded as 16..." and "Plagis ended the war with a tally of 16 enemy aircraft confirmed destroyed..." Suggest removing the first instance and leaving the second.
 * All OK <b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">—<b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">Cliftonian</b> <b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">(talk)</b></b> 17:52, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
 * It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * All major points cited using WP:RS.
 * No issues with OR.
 * You use a short cite titled "Lucas 1981, p. 262." however there is no corresponding listing in the reference section. Could it be added?
 * Could page numbers be added for the "Charousis 2010" short citations?
 * All OK <b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">—<b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">Cliftonian</b> <b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">(talk)</b></b> 17:52, 23 September 2013 (UTC)


 * It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Most major points seem to be covered without going into undue detail.
 * Level of coverage seems appropriate.


 * It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
 * No issues here.


 * It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * No issues here.


 * It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
 * a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales):  d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
 * Images are all PD and seem appropriate to the article.


 * Overall:
 * a Pass/Fail:
 * Just a few minor prose and technical issues and a couple of tweaks to the references req'd, otherwise fine. Happy to discuss anything you disagree with or need clarified. Anotherclown (talk) 22:10, 20 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Hi, sorry about the delay, just got back now from a week or so in a place without internet. I've put replies above, I hope all of this is adequate. Thank you for the great review and I hope you are well and having a pleasant week. <b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">—<b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">Cliftonian</b> <b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">(talk)</b></b> 17:52, 23 September 2013 (UTC)
 * No worries at all. Changes looks good so I'm passing now. Anotherclown (talk) 10:50, 24 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much again for the review. <b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">—<b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">Cliftonian</b> <b style="color:white; background:darkgreen">(talk)</b></b> 10:57, 24 September 2013 (UTC)