Talk:John Ward Westcott/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:55, 27 October 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 20:55, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Infobox

 * The text in the best known and notable work can begin with a capital letter
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:07, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * Wiklink Michigan-Canadian border to the relevant article
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:49, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "and enabled United States Mail delivery to ships 'on the fly' by addressing to the ships name and the only floating postal zip code of 48222." - repetition of "ships"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:49, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink zip code to the relevant article
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:49, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "This developed out further in the twentieth-first century by specially designed supply boats" - twenty-first
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:49, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Early life and education

 * "He had four brothers (George, Edward, Charles, David) and two sisters (Mary Jane, Susie)" - the parentheses are not needed IMO
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Career

 * "He also developed the first lightship on Lake St. Clair in Michigan. This he did by buying an old flat-bottomed boat and put a light on it as a guiding light for ships on the lake." - consider merging these two sentences together
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:48, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Detroit River
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:48, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "They were range indicators on Windmill Point as a guiding light" - typo; should be There
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:48, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Wescott in the 1870s was working in Detroit as agent representative " - as an agent
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "People didn't mind paying this amount," - no contractions per MOS:CONTRACTIONS
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "the service provided shipping trade information and national-international news." - national and international news.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The procedure then was that a man in a rowboat was towed out by the Florence B." - The following procedure saw a man
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "it was then rowed to the next oncoming freighter to do the same procedure." - and it was subsequently
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "and by 1972 was accounting for over 700,000 pieces of mail being handled per year." - more than
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Wescott's service meant that ships didn't have to stop and go ashore" - no contractions please
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "to pick up their mail" - collect
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "the SS J.W. Wescott No.1." - the word in bold needs spacing after the period
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

think these two sentences can be merged together
 * "It was renewed on a United States Postal Service contract in 1974. The work was done by non-postal employees of the Wescott Company around the clock seven days a week." -
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The larger vessels and freighters traveling the Detroit River do not stop in general," - traveling down the
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "As of 2017, the company gets about a third of its income from the post office," - The company currently receives
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:13, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Personal life

 * "Wescott was an alderman in the fourth Ward in Detroit from 1884 to 1885. He was associated with the Episcopalian church." - consider merging these two sentences together
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:18, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "He was a member in several clubs" - of
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:18, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "In has activities as a ship captain" - his
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:18, 28 October 2020 (UTC)