Talk:Johnny Antonelli/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 12:42, 5 November 2020 (UTC)

I'll pick this one up, review coming as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 12:42, 5 November 2020 (UTC)

Initial review

Lead

 * Where is his middle name sourced?
 * His height and weight aren't sourced anywhere that I can see either.
 * It's a little repetitive to mention the $52,000 bonus twice in short succession perhaps. Do we need both mentions?
 * "never pitching more than 96 innings", perhaps add "in a single year" or similar if that's what is implied?

Early life

 * Probably worth adding "née" in the brackets ahead of Messore.
 * Is Jefferson High School mentioned here Thomas Jefferson High School (Rochester, New York)?
 * "from nine of the 16 Major League Baseball teams", avoid switching between digits and words when using comparable figures, per MOS:NUMNOTES.
 * Add (MLB) after Major League Baseball to explain further uses of the abbreviation.
 * "the largest bonus", was this the largest signing bonus so to speak? If so I would add that to the sentence perhaps.
 * "the largest bonus in baseball history at the time.[2][1][3]" although it's not a hard and fast rule, refs are generally presented in numerical order unless there's a specific reason not to.
 * "fighting for Boston's first National League pennant", fighting seems a little sensationalist. Perhaps, just challenging or competing?

Braves' "bonus baby"

 * "Antonelli gain more experience. Antonelli", the double use of Antonelli in quick succession is a little repetitive here. Perhaps drop the second for "He"?
 * "in a 4– triumph", something missing here.

Giants' All-Star pitcher

 * "Willie Mays biographer" > Mays'
 * "led the league in ERA", is there a need to relink ERA again here? It's used pretty frequently prior to this and is linked appropriately at the first usage.
 * Add a convert template for "100 degrees Fahrenheit".
 * "suspended Antonelli indefinitely without pay, pending an apology", do we know if he made the apology or Durocher relented?
 * It wasn't clear in the sources I found, which is why I left it unclear in the article. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:52, 6 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "from Section Five of the Polo Grounds", Polo Grounds is used here but not linked until the next mention.

Indians and Braves, retirement

 * Polo Grounds is linked again here.