Talk:Johnny Olszewski (politician)/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 21:50, 5 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Queen of Hearts (talk · contribs) 04:12, 14 May 2024 (UTC)

Let's do this, although I'll hold off until the dust is settled from the House primary. That said, off the bat: Queen of Hearts  ( talk ) 04:12, 14 May 2024 (UTC)


 * Thanks for reviewing! I’m hoping the primary doesn’t take as long as I think it might, but I also have a feeling that we won’t have to worry about that affecting the review of this page too much as the MD-02 primary will probably be called later tonight or early tomorrow. Y2hyaXM (talk) 10:53, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
 * I've also adjusted the lead to closer match what you've written in your review so far. Please let me know if anything else should be changed. Thanks again! Y2hyaXM (talk) 13:03, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @Queen of Hearts Just a heads up, I'll be taking a brief break from May 26 to June 2, and will be unable to make any edits during that time. No rush, seeing as you're on break yourself, but I ask that you please do not continue your review until before/after that date range. Thanks again for reviewing! Y2hyaXM (talk) 15:50, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
 * I misread 26 as 28; seeing as it's the 25th, I'll continue after. Enjoy your wikibreak. Queen of Hearts  ( talk ) 19:13, 25 May 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks! I've returned from my break now, so I should be available for the review anytime. Y2hyaXM (talk) 01:44, 2 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Alright! expect it within the next few days. Queen of Hearts (🏳️‍⚧️ • 🏳️‍🌈) 01:56, 2 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @Queen of Hearts, any updates on this? Y2hyaXM (talk) 13:07, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Sorry, been busy with real life. I'll try to get to this soon Queen of Hearts (🏳️‍⚧️ • 🏳️‍🌈) 05:04, 14 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the update! Y2hyaXM (talk) 12:30, 14 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Mostly done; will do the spotchecks, give it another lookover, and place it on hold in a few hours. Queen of Hearts (🏳️‍⚧️ • 🏳️‍🌈) 20:54, 17 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I've made the adjustments you've recommended, just need to work on fixing the proseline in the subsections you mentioned. Any specifics you might have from these sections would be very helpful. feel free to look through the changes I've made to see if there's any other changes you'd recommend I make. Thanks again! Y2hyaXM (talk) 21:19, 17 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Your changes look good to me. I've added something I missed in the "career" section and completed my checks. Placing on hold. Queen of Hearts (🏳️‍⚧️ • 🏳️‍🌈) 01:21, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @Queen of Hearts I've made some further adjustments to the tennis barn paragraph and added some additional citations to back up some of the other claims made in the article. Should be good to go now. Y2hyaXM (talk) 01:40, 18 June 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * Lead is quite short; per MOS:LEADSIZE, an article this long should generally have two or three paragraphs of lead.
 * also known by his nickname Johnny O and He previously served two terms in the Maryland House of Delegates representing District 6 don't need citations per MOS:LEADCITE

Early life and education

 * looks fine; sandwiching is annoying but seems unavoidable

Career

 * shouldn't Governor Bob Ehrlich appointed Olszewski to the seat on June 10, and was sworn in on June 12 say Governor Bob Ehrlich appointed Olszewski to the seat on June 10, and he was sworn in on June 12?
 * In 2012, Olszewski served as a delegate to the Democratic National Convention, pledged to President Barack Obama – one-sentence paragraph, could this be merged into another paragraph? fine if not
 * In April 2017, Dundalk Eagle reported that Olszewski was considering a run for Baltimore County Executive → In April 2017, the Dundalk Eagle reported that Olszewski was considering a run for Baltimore County Executive
 * edging out state senator James Brochin by nine votes – Brochin is introduced earlier in the paragraph so → edging out Brochin by nine votes
 * In December 2023, Olszewski became the president of the Maryland Association of Counties – another one-sentence paragraph, although I don't see where this could be merged
 * Olszewski won the Democratic primary election on May 14, 2024, with 78.7 percent of the vote one-sentence para; could probably be merged into the one below
 * Olszewski was elected to a full four-year term in 2006 and subsequently re-elected in 2010 needs a citation

Political positions

 * In February 2023, following the shooting death of 17-year-old Tre'shaun Harmon in Towson, Maryland, Olszewski pledged additional security measures in downtown Towson could be merged into the above paragraph
 * "Education", "Electoral and ethical reform", "Environment", "Gun control", and "Housing and development" subsection has quite a bit of proseline

Personal life
looks good

Electoral history
looks good

Miscellaneous

 * don't see any unreliable sources
 * citation 4 should have a "clipping"; see User:Sammi Brie/Clipping
 * Since this article has many sources (not a bad thing), I'll spotcheck the 10 that are used at least twice:
 * [6]: looks good
 * [7]: looks good
 * [8]:
 * seems to have a typo in the title; the source says 04" but the cite says 03"
 * Marisa is the current environmental policy manager for the Maryland League of Conservation Voters – don't see this in the source
 * [13]: looks good
 * [18]: looks good
 * [19]: looks good
 * [20]: good
 * [21]: good
 * [23]: good
 * [24]:
 * he faced state senator James Brochin, county councilwoman Vicki Almond, and Kevin Francis Marron – Marron isn't mentioned in the source
 * During the 2018 legislative session, Olszewski testified in support of "Leia's law", a bill that would make it a misdemeanor in Baltimore County to leave a loaded gun where a child aged 16 or 17 could access it – law isn't named in the source
 * [133]: good
 * [162]:
 * Olszewski also condemned comments made by Maryland Council on American–Islamic Relations director Zainab Chaudry that compared Israel to Nazi Germany and questioned the death toll from the 2023 Hamas-led attack on Israel – source simply says that they "praised Hamas"
 * Cordish was initially instructed to schedule an administrative hearing for variances that would allow for construction to break ground for the tennis barn, as the project was deemed to be too big to be an "accessory structure" for his residence. However, then-county permit director Mike Millanoff authorized Cordish's project to move forward without an administrative hearing is quite close paraphrasing of.