Talk:Johnny Thunder (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:58, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

I will review this later today! --K. Peake 07:58, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Should Pye studios really be piped to when Pye Records in linked in the infobox anyway?
 * I think so since Pye Studios may end up with its own article one day, rather than being a redirect to Pye Records.


 * Move the inspiration sentence to being the one before the musical description
 * Done.


 * The term "simple" is not notable for the lead
 * Done.


 * "The song is one of" → ""Johnny Thunder" is one of"
 * Done. I also moved this sentence so it opened the paragraph, which seemed a bit more natural.


 * "Davies expressed desires publicly" → "Ray expressed desires publicly" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
 * Done.


 * Should Anthony Gezale's stage name really be italicised?
 * I believe so by MOS:WORDSASWORDS.

Background and composition

 * Quote box and first para look good!
 * Should Johnny Thunder be surrounded by speech marks or is this about the name, not the song title?
 * I clarified it as The Johnny Thunder character...


 * Remove comma before "David Watts"
 * Done.


 * "lead character, Johnny, as" → "lead character Johnny, as"
 * Done.


 * Why is Johnny Thunder italicised?
 * MOS:WORDSASWORDS


 * Are you sure straightforward is an appropriate term, rather than something like traditional?
 * Andy Miller used the word "straightforward" to describe the song's simple production and Jon Savage describes it as one of the album's "great rock songs". I'm worried the way I had it written was a bit too close to WP:SYNTH, since the authors were saying different things, so I've rewritten it. I've left Savage to source it as being a rock song, while I've moved Miller's mention of it being a straightforward production to the recording section.


 * Pipe rock to Rock music
 * Done.


 * Remove the Kinks' 1968 album introduction since this being in the lead is sufficient
 * Done.

Recording and release

 * Img and first para look good!
 * "when he expanded its track listing" → "when he expanded the track listing"
 * Done.


 * Remove comma before "and personally phoned", also moving [22] solely to the end of the sentence
 * Done.


 * "likened its fast strumming to" → "likened the fast strumming to"
 * Done.


 * The eventual guitarist role is not sourced and why is Johnny Thunders italicised?
 * Removed guitarist mention. Italicised because of MOS:WORDSASWORDS.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; smooth article here! --K. Peake 20:24, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for another review . I’m away for the weekend, so I’ll get to this one during the week.  Tkbrett  (✉) 12:27, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your patience, responses are above.  Tkbrett  (✉) 15:09, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, quality job and I understand your reasoning for not implementing certain changes! --K. Peake 07:13, 23 August 2022 (UTC)