Talk:Jon Nurse/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 20:37, 3 July 2018 (UTC)

I'll pick this one up, will post review soon. Kosack (talk) 20:37, 3 July 2018 (UTC)

Initial review

Lead

 * Jon would be a common hypocorism of Jonathan which should be avoided, per WP:ALTNAME.
 * I think it's the norm to avoid using terms such as currently for footballers clubs, per WP:PRECISELANG to avoid statements that can quickly become out of date.
 * Link player-coach.
 * Link League Two.

Early career

 * "His first start for Sutton was a game against Basingstoke Town, and scored his first goal shortly after", should that be "and he scored his first goal..."?

Stevenage Borough

 * "Nurse's first goal for the club came in sixth appearance", > in his sixth appearance.
 * Link play-off final to 2005 Conference National play-off Final.

Dagenham & Redbridge

 * Unlink Morecambe and Wembley Stadium, both linked in previous sections
 * "in Dagenham's entertaining 4–3 loss away to Brighton & Hove Albion", entertaining comes across as opinion rather than fact and the source doesn't really seem to support it.
 * Unlink Carlisle United, linked previously.
 * Closing quote mark missing from the final sentence of the section.

Barnet

 * Conference National is mentioned twice before this but is linked here, move the link up to the first mention.
 * " At the end of the season, in June 2013, Nurse was placed on the transfer-list by Barnet.", needs a source.
 * Link player-coach.

Met Police

 * Are we sure his time at Loxwood was a loan? The only source used for it (ref 128) mentions him leaving Met Police more than once, so at the very least it sounds like it was a loan followed by a permanent spell. The infobox also states no appearances for Loxwood but the source would seem to suggest he definitely played for them on several occasions or were they not league apps?

International career

 * "qualifying match in Dominica", should that be against Dominica?
 * "He became the first ever full international for Dagenham & Redbridge.", what's the source for this?
 * "Four days later, on 6 September, he played the whole match as Barbados lost 2–0 to Trinidad and Tobago at the Barbados National Stadium", if this was his last cap for Barbados I would try and mention it somewhere.

Personal life

 * "with his grandparents and mum", mum seems a bit informal, change to mother perhaps?