Talk:Jordan Geller/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mikehawk10 (talk · contribs) 04:47, 19 November 2021 (UTC)

I'll take a look; this has been pending for way too long. — Mikehawk10 (talk) 04:47, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
 * As a heads up, this is going to be updated in chunks; there over eighty references to go through, so it will take me a while to look through each one to evaluate the extent to which the statements made in the article are backed up by the text of those sources. — Mikehawk10 (talk) 04:55, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Hey @Mikehawk10. Thanks for doing this review!! I'll try to resolve the issues by next week. Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 06:49, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Not a problem! Just as a heads up, it is probably going to take me at least the next 24 hours to finish filling out the table. I’m only about halfway through the references at this point and I still need to do a thorough check for spelling/grammar/style. — Mikehawk10 (talk) 06:52, 19 November 2021 (UTC)

Fixes

 * 1) I mean I see your point but the sentence right before states: "Geller's parents refused to purchase him any Air Jordans as a child, deeming them too expensive, so he acquired his first pair of Air Jordans while in college for $125." I could write: "Geller's name is coincidentally close to basketball player Michael Jordan, who is also the namesake of Geller's favorite sneakers, Air Jordans." But that seems a bit redundant when juxtaposed with the previous sentence. What do you think?
 * b
 * 1) Yea, I had a feeling a reviewer is not gonna like the Sneaker News ref. But I tried my best to only use it for ABOUTSELF reasons vis-a-vis Geller. I managed to remove all four Sneaker News ref. I wasn't able to find a better source for the "$10 million" sales, so I removed it completely.
 * 2) I'm not sure if I entirely agree that's an OR/SNYTH statement. But, out of an abundance of caution, I removed the "in order to "show Nike who they'd banned"" part.
 * 3) Attributed to Geller.
 * 4) Agreed; rewrote per your suggestion.
 * 5) Okay, included the word "known"
 * 2. c
 * Good call. I rewrote it a bit.

Pinging Mhawk10. Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 23:37, 25 November 2021 (UTC)


 * All of the issues I've found are resolved. This is a GA. — Mhawk10 (talk) 06:21, 29 November 2021 (UTC)