Talk:Jorge López Pérez/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 15:29, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:29, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I have responded below. Thank you for the thorough review. MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 19:02, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * Can you expand on López Pérez's pre-criminal life? Where was he born, where did he go to school, what was his conduct in the military like, etc.?
 * Thank you for bringing this up. The Mexican government never released any information on López Pérez's early life. After extensive searches, I was not even able to find a single source giving us his age or DOB/POB. In fact, we only know about him because inquisitive journalists in the mid 2000s requested info from the Mexican government via their transparency law about an alleged Zetas founding member known as "Jorge López". The government confirmed that there were three matches in their databases, and proceeded to share his entry/exit dates from the military and that he was part of the elite parachuting team. He left the military in 1981, near the end of the Mexican Dirty War and almost 20 years before the majority of the other founding Zetas members left the military (Los Zetas was formed in the late 1990s). We have DOB/POB for most of these other figures, which highlights a huge information gap in government files between López Pérez and the other Zetas founders. I wrote a publication last year about him because there are many unconfirmed rumors that López Pérez left Mexico and that his name may not even be "Jorge López Pérez" (as it is "too generic"). This guy was a well-trained elite soldier with experience in dirty war tactics. I wouldn't be surprised if he was somehow responsible for this information gap. I have a request pending from the Mexican government via their transparency law to confirm if the "Jorge López Pérez" they have on file as a Zetas founder / ex-military is still being searched.
 * I don't think I've been this impressed with an editor's work and dedication to something before. I'll strike this off and you can continue working on this after the article concludes. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  10:21, 8 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Found an unaccented Cancún: that extended from Cancun


 * The use of "turf" in a Wikipedia article feels erroneous to me.
 * - I changed it to "region" and I think it reads much better now.


 * following 14 March arrest of Cárdenas Guillén. following the 14 March (year?) arrest