Talk:Joseph A. Lopez/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:44, 18 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments Short article, well constructed, just a few brief notes above, so I'll put it on hold while we go through them. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:00, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "1781 – 1841" unspaced.
 * I think it's pretty standard that you can put a space between dates separated by an en-dash.  Ergo Sum  14:22, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Nope, per MOS between years like that it's unspaced en-dash. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:45, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Does it matter that it's now not just two years, but a year and a specific date?  Ergo Sum  19:38, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Yes, spaced en-dash is now the order of the day! The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:39, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * " lasted only several months" reads curiously to me, maybe replace several with "a matter of"?
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  14:23, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * " to St. Inigoes, Maryland, he garnered a" seems to be missing something like "where".
 * I don't see a grammatical error. The garnering refers to the time of his presidency.  Ergo Sum  14:24, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I missed the "though" at the start of the sentence, my fault, please ignore. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:47, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "sent to St. Inigoes, Maryland, he garnered a reputation" in what capacity?
 * Can you explain?  Ergo Sum  14:24, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * What did he do there as a vocation? The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:46, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I've added that he was sent there to recuperate.  Ergo Sum  19:39, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Do we know how many children there were in total?
 * The sources says at least four, but seems to suggest there were more than that. I don't have an exact number.  Ergo Sum  14:25, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Huarte enrolled her daughters in the Georgetown Visitation Academy, which two of the daugheters" probably no need to repeat (and mis-spell!) daughter in this context.
 * Fixed.  Ergo Sum  14:26, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * You have "Georgetown College" as a pipe twice but with different links, that's confusing.
 * Fixed.  Ergo Sum  14:26, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Lead has "first pres of college" and prose has "first pres of university". In the UK these are different things, so perhaps we can align the nomenclature here?
 * Fixed.  Ergo Sum  14:27, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "The only notable event that occurred..." this is somewhat POV.
 * Fair. That's how the source puts it, but I've rephrased.  Ergo Sum  14:28, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "His presidency lasted only several months, before he became ill,[4] and was succeeded " same comment re: "only several", and the lead suggested he resigned, but that doesn't seem to be mentioned here?
 * I've rephrased again. I've kept resignation though, because he resigned due to illness.  Ergo Sum  14:29, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * No need to link coffin.
 * Unlinked.  Ergo Sum  14:29, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your comments. I've left a note on each.  Ergo Sum  14:30, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * It appears that things are looking squared away.  Ergo Sum  19:40, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Indeed, I was just taking a final pass. As always, a good piece of work, nice doing business with you.  The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:43, 19 September 2019 (UTC)