Talk:Joseph Berchtold/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk · contribs) 14:43, 8 August 2015 (UTC)

Prose
Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 15:03, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Repeating the same citation over and over again next to each other is unnecessary✅
 * Section headers that are like "Career in the ..." could be rewritten as "... career" (suggestion only)✅
 * Second paragraph in lead should be split✅ Kierzek (talk) 18:46, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Passing, well done.--Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 20:10, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. Kierzek (talk) 21:24, 9 August 2015 (UTC)