Talk:Joseph Saragossi/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aircorn (talk · contribs) 01:38, 5 November 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for your work on this article. Unfortunately I have to fail it as it fails criteria 1b (in particular the layout criteria) and the broadness criteria 3b. The article needs to be expanded into sections and more information about his life needs to be added. It doesn't need to be long, but does need to be organised under headings. You could turn each paragraph into a section; lead, Early Life, his time as a rabbi in Safed and his death. If he was the object of a weekly pilgrimage then you would expect more information to be available, although I will admit that I found very little. Is there more that you can add from the books cited? Legends of Palestine may have some more information you could use. Also I think it would look better if you make the column width on your references section a bit wider. There is also some close paraphrasing with the one source I did check which will need to be sorted out before you re-nominate or pass DYK. Regards AIR corn (talk) 01:38, 5 November 2011 (UTC)