Talk:Josh Harris (businessman)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Averageuntitleduser (talk · contribs) 15:38, 8 March 2024 (UTC)

Howdy! I'll be getting to this soon! Averageuntitleduser (talk) 15:38, 8 March 2024 (UTC)

Well-written
Okay, these comments may seem a bit lowsy, but I really have read the article fully. The prose is just so smooth. On another note, I'm gonna be lenient towards the NBA, NFL, and NHL acronyms in the lead; they'd be a pain to spell out.
 * Penn's — this feels a tad too informal, perhaps "the university's"
 * Drexel had filed for bankruptcy earlier that year... — this one's a bit of a run on sentence.
 * He was among several businessmen in 2017 that met with the Trump administration — this is a bit of a jump from 2009 in the previous sentence. I would move it to the beginning of the next paragraph.
 * Harris was included on Sports Business Journal's "Most Influential: Dealmakers & Disrupters" list in 2022. — because of how small the publication is, I don't see the relevance. Has he been put on other similar lists?

Verifiable with no original research
Earwig shows a low score of 22%, a lot of which are long names or ideas that are hard to rephrase. The CiteHighlighter script has most sources green. The Forbes articles in yellow are written by staff members. The three refs in orange, two being press releases, are fine as primary sources. Most of the refs that aren't highlighted at all either pass reliability, are fine as primary sources, and/or are attributed in-text. However, I have some quibbles:
 * Consider bundling refs 106—109, or removing one of them if they aren't critical.
 * As there is no consensus to its reliability, five Business Insider sources is a fair amount. I would remove or recite most of them.
 * I don't see the reliability of PhillyVoice
 * Ditto for Buyouts Insider
 * Same for the Commercial Observer
 * As well as C-Suite Spotlight
 * And finally, Front Office Sports. I would remove or recite most of the above. Of course, feel free to contest me on these.

Spot-check
Randomly generated these citations:
 * Where's the "1982" coming from? Looks good otherwise.
 * Supports the "general managers", but I can't find how you extrapolated the "employee empowerment" bit. Looks good otherwise.
 * Looks good.
 * Again, where is "September" coming from?
 * Does not confirm that he agreed to a plan by Hinkie, I also think the season details need citations. Where does it say that Embiid was drafted.
 * I compounded it with a Washington Post piece, but looks good.
 * Looks good.
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 * Where are the basketball league and "48ers" coming from?
 * I compounded it with a Washington Post piece, but looks good.
 * Looks good.
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 * Where are the basketball league and "48ers" coming from?
 * Looks good.
 * Looks good
 * Where are the basketball league and "48ers" coming from?
 * Where are the basketball league and "48ers" coming from?
 * Where are the basketball league and "48ers" coming from?

Broad in its coverage
A wide variety of sources across a long timeframe are used proportionally. Looks good.

Neutral
Looks good on this front. I haven't found much explicitly negative reporting. Only two comments:
 * with diversity, equity, and inclusion, and employee empowerment being promoted within his workplace culture. — the "employee empowerment" bit is teetering on WP:EXCEPTIONAL. Please find some other sources that support it. As well, the "diversity, equity, and inclusion" bit should be attributed to him.
 * Due to public criticism, he would reverse a decision to reduce the salaries of HBSE, 76ers, and Devils employees making under $100,000 by 20% during the hiatus. — I feel like this is phrased too positively? Of course, Harris wouldn't be the only one behind the initial decision, but looking at the news coverage, he seems to have gotten a lot of criticism. Perhaps: "In/on [insert date], HBSE announced [insert what happened]. After receiving public criticism, Harris [blah blah blah]."

Stable
No recent edit wars or content disputes.

Illustrated
Images are all creative commons or own works. They all give a better understanding of the topic; I like how the 76ers and Devils pictures correspond with their paragraphs.

Summary
Great (and very diligent) work on this article! I believe it's close to the finish line. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 23:51, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Let me know if I've missed something in the spot-check, but considering its status, I'm gonna ask you to skim through the article for source-text integrity, especially with months/years and just making sure that citations are not too early or late. I don't expect it to be thorough, however, a lot of my comments were minor. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 03:09, 11 March 2024 (UTC)
 * All listed comments have been addressed. ~ Dissident93 (talk) 09:57, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
 * I would agree! I think that's all I got! Averageuntitleduser (talk) 13:36, 12 March 2024 (UTC)