Talk:Josh fight/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:48, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * See MOS:LEADCITE, those citations can be moved to the main part of the article as there should be nothing in the lead that isn't covered in more detail in the main body of the article.
 * Fixed. I left the WSJ citation as it is a direct quote - let me know if that was incorrect.


 * It appears to have had some coverage in the UK too, anything useful in here?
 * Response: I don't think so, it's mostly repeating what other journalists said, and the sentiment is covered by the quote from WSJ.


 * "Arizona on " comma after AZ.
 * Fixed.


 * "invitation to go viral" this sentence is unreferenced.
 * Fixed.


 * Avoid single-sentence paras.
 * Edited.


 * "64 thousand likes and 21 thousand" not exactly I suspect.
 * Fixed., added "over" to make more accurate.


 * Link Reddit.
 * Linked.


 * "Nebraska as a site for" comment after Nebraska.
 * Added.


 * "the United States, with" no need to link that.
 * Removed.


 * "private property. The property" bit repetitive, slight re-phrase.
 * Edited.


 * "6-pack" six-pack.
 * Switched.


 * "brought in from home." this sentence is unreferenced.
 * Sentence removed - may have been WP:OR.


 * "from Omaha in " you've linked all the other sub-US locations, might as well link Omaha. The first time, i.e. previous section!
 * Linked.


 * "at Children's Hospital & Medical Center" you already abbreviated that, can use that instead of the full name.
 * Edited.


 * "was crowned with" no need to link, and "crowned with .. crown" is repetitive.
 * Switched word to avoid repetition.


 * "the Children's Hospital & Medical Center—" again, use abbreviation and don't overlink.
 * Fixed.


 * Ref 6 should be The Wall Street Journal.
 * Fixed.


 * Ref 17 is oddly formatted and needs access-date, publisher etc.
 * Fixed, I hope?


 * Be consistent with linking publishers/websites, in the refs.
 * Generally removed except where "cite-tweet" demanded it.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:29, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Great! I've gone through and made edits accordingly. Thanks for taking a look at this and let me know if there are any other changes needed. Ganesha811 (talk) 12:53, 7 September 2021 (UTC)