Talk:Joy Hakim

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Straw men
 ' However, she has faced some criticism for being "too multicultural" and trying to make history "fun" for kids." ' 

This is highly biased. Who doesn't want history to be "fun"? From Straw man: A straw man "argument" is a bogus, distorted or deliberately flawed interpretation of an otherwise valid position that has been altered so it can be more easily attacked, delegitimized and disassembled (hence the straw man metaphor) before the eyes and ears of an otherwise impartial audience unfamiliar with the facts and history of an issue or case.

&mdash; Omphaloscope talk 01:09, 1 September 2006 (UTC)


 * The article used to say that the criticism was for trying to make it "fun" at the expense of accuracy. A convenient editing out, eh? 12.175.230.56 06:36, 31 May 2007 (UTC)


 * The source of this criticism is a web-only,  fringe group-- unsubstantiated source.  KenThomas (talk) 00:18, 10 December 2009 (UTC)


 * Not exactly.--KJRehberg (talk) 21:12, 30 March 2010 (UTC)


 * You know, Iv'e done this history and it includes ample details. — Preceding unsigned comment added by StevenDP (talk • contribs) 21:03, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

More Straw Man
' ' However, she has faced some criticism, generally from conservatives, for being "too multicultural", too hard on conservative presidents and not critical enough of liberal administrations. ' '

The way the article is currently written, it looks like it's trying to make conservatives look petty in their complaints, thus delegitimizing the actual (unsourced and unquoted) arguments that may have been proposed by said conservatives. Imagine if it were reworded to say:

' ' However, there is much criticism, mostly from those that lived through some eras covered in her books, that her works are overly international and un-American, in addition to the defamation of conservative presidents and the ignoring of liberal politicians' faults. ' '


 * Although it would have nearly the opposite effect to word it that way, all that's changed is the exact phrasing. None of the verified facts have been changed. 12.175.230.56 06:36, 31 May 2007 (UTC)


 * Regardless, ALL of this line of discussion is bases on an unsubstantiated source.  Seems moot.  KenThomas (talk) 00:20, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

Editing of Wikipedia article by the subject
I just checked the edit history and the last two edits were by someone with the username "Joy Hakim". If this person really is Joy Hakim, then I think this violates policies on editing one's own article. If the person is not really Joy Hakim, then I think that it is a case of impersonation which I also believe to be against Wikipedia policies. MarkGyver 23:37, 27 June 2007 (UTC)


 * Does this seem to have affected the substance or bias of the article? (On a quick diff I don't see evidence).  Worth watching.  KenThomas (talk) 00:27, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

Format Errors; BIAS
There are many format errors such as lack of spacing and punctuation where it is needed. I have to agree the article itself is biased in a way. It needs to be rewritten. Completely. Or else deleted. An article giving bias and illogical information about another person must be attended to. WikiSuccess1048 (talk) 00:59, 12 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Do you still see a bias? Would the bias be eliminated by removing the "criticism section,"  or do you see other issues?  KenThomas (talk) 00:28, 10 December 2009 (UTC)


 * Please properly format your comments. The perceived bias may be gone after my rewrite, and I don't think that WikiSuccess1048 was referring to the "criticism" section.  According to my disinterested review of the older revision of this article it read more like a dust jacket biography or publishing house biography blurb than an objective encyclopedia entry.--KJRehberg (talk) 21:09, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Restructured, Cited, and Edited, but needs Biographical data
The article has been restructured, properly cited, and the excessively POV press-release material has been removed. The criticism section has been expanded, rewritten, and cited. The cleanup tag has been removed. The Stub tag remains because the article needs more biographical data..--KJRehberg (talk) 21:03, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

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