Talk:Joy SpearChief-Morris

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Instead of having the table of contents be the first thing in your article, you'll need to have a short introductory paragraph. You just need a little something at the very start of the article. Look to established articles, like Jordin Tootoo, for examples.

Sometimes you refer to her as "Joy", so those instances have to be changed to "Spear Chief-Morris".

Citations should go after the periods. So it's: Sentence.[1]. Not: Sentence[2].

I would not include the "Curiosities" section as it is. However, if you deem the information valuable, you can include the facts elsewhere in the article.

This article is generally fairly well done and just needs some minor edits. Give your article another round of editing, ensuring that your writing is technically proficient and neutral.

Keep up the good work! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Erintanner (talk • contribs) 01:43, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

Overall, great article I really enjoyed all the facts you found on Joy. She is a very interesting young athlete. Only a few things I noticed
 * The heading "Introduction" maybe switch it to "Background"
 * In the heading "Early Life", track and field is not an event it is the sport specifically and high jump is the event in the sport.
 * Your heading "Volunteerism" maybe switch to "Volunteer Experience"
 * If it's possible I suggest putting the accomplishments in a chart, but if not it looks good like that as well
 * The spacing between "Personal Records" and Outdoor has to big of a gap
 * Citations are well done and they open which is great

Aliwood08 (talk) 03:05, 31 October 2019 (UTC)