Talk:Juan Bielovucic/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 00:33, 17 October 2013 (UTC)

Hey Tomobe, I'll be glad to take this one. Comments to follow in the next 1-5 days. Thanks as always for your contributions; I'll be looking forward to reading it. Khazar2 (talk) 00:33, 17 October 2013 (UTC)

As usual, I've made some tweaks and small fixes as I went. I only see a few small issues on my initial pass that I couldn't immediately resolve--let me know your thoughts:


 * "Most sources refer to him as Jean or Juan Bielovucic, while others refer to him as Juan or Jean Bielovucic Cavalié. In Croatia he is known as Ivan Bjelovučić." -- this should probably be in the body of the article somewhere rather than the lead.
 * "and the Pacific Ocean" -- this makes it sound as if he crossed it-- is there a way to phrase this better ("part of the Pacific Ocean"? "a bit of the..."?)

Checklist
Thank you very much for taking up the review. I tried to address your concerns. Could you please revisit those parts of the article to see if the new development is satisfactory?--Tomobe03 (talk) 21:43, 18 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Yep, that does it--thanks for the quick response. -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:50, 18 October 2013 (UTC)