Talk:Judy Kibinge

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Tcha23. Peer reviewers: BoardsofScotland.

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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 5 September 2019 and 4 December 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Musicwtv. Peer reviewers: Hydra Flask, Robotictree.

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Peer Review User: BoardsofScotland
'''The article is a good start towards a full Wikipedia entry. It has good information about the filmmaker, including her early life, notable films, and other facts. The structure of the paragraphs are well-separated and the thoughts come across in a good manner. A few things to keep in mind when discussing or introducing terms is to not use too many words. Instead of saying something like "...known for establishing DocuBox, which is a documentary film fund", a more concise option is to omit the words "which is". Another thing to work on is to make sure that all claims have sources to confirm their accuracy. One final thought would be to update the Career section of the Wikipedia page as it contains a lot of information that could be put in the Biography section of the introduction.'''

Peer Review User: Hydra Flask
The article does a good job on highlighting important aspects of the directors personal life, as well as their career. The table that was created for their filmography was done nicely as well.

Make sure there is no repetitions in the article. For instance, the career section shouldn't start with explaining who the director is, as it was already previously explained. Also, make sure the language used flows nicely together, drop some unnecessary transition words if possible to make it a little more concise. Try to separate her career sections into paragraphs a little more, depending on the topic being discussed. Also, it can be difficult, but attempt to find a photo of the director for the page as it helps the readers understand who the person is better. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 142.127.228.220 (talk) 04:01, 5 November 2019 (UTC)