Talk:Jumanji (Azealia Banks song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs) 06:56, 29 September 2016 (UTC)

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Infobox

 * Remove the caption; it's not necessary if its the only cover.
 * Add an alt to the image please.

Lead section

 * Add the release year of Fantasea in parentheses.
 * ""Jumanji" is composed as a tropical track with a "strong bass" influenced by kuduro, dancehall, and calypso music." — "Jumanji is composed as a tropical track with musical influences of kuduro, dancehall, and calypso music." Don't add a quote unless there is a reference (having said that, its advised not to have citations in the lead).
 * Lyrically, Banks "delivers lines about media scandals and keeping true to herself". — Same thing here; try and describe it by saying something like "Lyrically, the song deals with Banks' involvement with media scandals and, as she described, "keeping true to herself".
 * Add additional details of live performances that track was included into.

Background and composition

 * Add the release year of Fantasea in parentheses.
 * Remove quote marks from "Fantastic", as it was considered to be used as an album title.
 * ""Jumanji" is a tropical song with a "strong bass" and elements of kuduro, dancehall, and calypso music." — Same as lead.
 * There are way too many clunked references in specific sentences (WP:Citation overkill). Try and be descriptive of each critic that sees the track in these identified genres, and expand on it.
 * "Instrumentally, the song has "ethereal twinkles of a harp", "elephantine trumpet blares", a "loudly clanging timpani", calypso steel drums, and "bomb-tick hi-hats"" — Again, too many sources in a sentence. Try and separate it in a way that individual critics have identified these instruments; example "According to and  from  and, they had identified instrumentation of a harp, trumpets, etc. However,  from  noticed the use of "calypso drums".
 * "Despite the song's title, the song's content is not based on the movie of the same name." — Unless there is a link verifying this statement, I feel this is slightly trivial.
 * In an article about "Jumanji", Grant Trimboli of Under the Gun Review opined that the song had a "Caribbean vibe"." — Shouldn't this be near the description of genres as stated above?
 * Unlike "music critic"; you already have it.

Critical reception

 * When you state anthem; if it is quoted by a critic as an "anthem" or "summer anthem", then use quotation marks.
 * Everything else is really good.

Accolades

 * These are literally two sentences; just try and merge it with the critical reception section, and split that one large paragraph into two.

Live performances

 * Are the performances really "notable"? You could probably just say "another performance".

Overall GA conclusion
A really good article! On hold for 7 days for additional editing. Please ping me for any inquires or when you have finished! Good luck. CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 04:35, 5 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Passing! CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 04:36, 5 October 2016 (UTC)