Talk:Jumbo/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Shyamal (talk · contribs) 14:40, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

This is a very interesting article and is close to GA but will need a bit more work. I hope the nominator is still active.

Referencing
General comment - a lot of referencing needs to be checked again. The Harvard format links are broken for several footnotes. Some of the sources are dead links, some of them can be replaced with alternate book / journal sources. Here are some sources that have not been used:
 * Sutherland's work does not even find mention.
 * The ivory king ... (many interesting bits)
 * http://www.jstor.org/stable/1293123
 * https://jscholarship.library.jhu.edu/handle/1774.2/8202
 * http://www.jstor.org/stable/40188110 The Republican Elephant came up in 1874 although Nast made an interesting cartoon of Jumbo
 * http://www.jstor.org/stable/41068417
 * Alice's purchase after Jumbo's death is not covered
 * Seems to miss out on the Disney Dumbo inspiration - ref. Chambers
 * http://www.jstor.org/stable/41068417
 * Alice's purchase after Jumbo's death is not covered
 * Seems to miss out on the Disney Dumbo inspiration - ref. Chambers

Article structure
Please check the sequence again esp. within the sale section, was the offer to buy made first or was the idea of selling first considered. Many of the subsections are too slim and could well be just a paragraph within a main section heading. This will also help in better layout of the pictures (now pushing headings around). Will revisit with more comments. Shyamal (talk) 03:18, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Pinging, just to be sure he/she saw this. FunkMonk (talk) 11:27, 21 March 2015 (UTC)

❌ - due to unforeseen circumstances - nominator User:SeeSpot Run has been blocked for sockpuppetry. Shyamal (talk) 14:25, 13 April 2015 (UTC)

What's with the simple one-clause sentences?
This reads like a children's book, not an encyclopedia article. 70.192.8.45 (talk) 08:58, 14 June 2015 (UTC)