Talk:June MBTA Redline Derailment

Solid. All things sound like a wikipedia article so you're doing it right. Some things to take not of however. First, in the third sentence, use the word latest instead of newest. It sounds more wikipedian. Or you could state how many days/weeks/months since that derailment to give a comparison on how often accidents happen. The rest is just expanding. Add what caused the derailment, and the did to address the issue (maybe a statement from the current head of the transportation department in Boston or from Mayor Walsh). Also grammar mistake: final sentence is injuries instead of injury's. Also put a space between the first two sentences or the derailment portion of the article. Give me the date of the accident. Good Job!

PeterFmega2 (talk) 18:25, 6 August 2019 (UTC)

Nadine's Peer Review
Every sentence needs to be cited, so first sentence needs a citation? After injured eleven, add people to specify? Add comma after "unknown"? Add hyphens to "50 - year - old"? Change sentence to "Although the direct cause of the derailment is currently unknown, the 50 - year - old train broke from the rails of the track at the middle car."? Swap out "The train continued to roll an additional 1800 feet down the tracks."? Change sentence to "...that house signal system hardware and control switches for the track."? Change "injury's" to "injuries". All sources are reliable pulled from local news.

Dan's review
This is good, Isaac -- useful, reliable information delivered clearly. Ted and Nadine already offered a lot of useful suggestions (adding the date, changing "newest" to "latest," changing "injury's", adding hyphens to 50-year-old, etc.). I'll also add that the "While the cause is unknown ... sentence" seems a little uneven. I'm not sure describing the derailment follows from "While the cause is unknown." Maybe something more "For reasons still unknown, the 50-year-old train car broke off from the rails [add where this happened]." The other thing to consider is whether this is better off as an addition to an existing article rather than it's own. (Maybe Massachusetts Bay Transportation Authority? Or MBTA Subway? Or Red Line (MBTA)?) I just worry that there might not be enough information about or enough relevance in this article by itself as it currently stands, which might cause Wikipedia to spike it. That said, you've done good research here, and I think the trickiest step from here is figuring out where that research belongs. Daniel.messier (talk) 12:23, 8 August 2019 (UTC)