Talk:Jungle cat/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 02:48, 29 April 2016 (UTC)

Specific comments

 * when describing the eyes, is it when the pupils are dilated (really big)?
 * The source does not mention that.


 * if it eats fruits, isn't it omnivorous?
 * Fruit-eating is supported by only one source, and I am not sure how common fruits are in the diet; almost all other sources present it as a carnivore. So I said "primarily" a carnivore. Any ideas?
 * you could say 'suggesting it is omnivorous' or try finding other sources about this
 * Took first suggestion. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 04:16, 2 May 2016 (UTC)


 * does "not recieve legal protection" mean there aren't any consequences for killing one, because Myanmar is listed to prohibit hunting but not give legal protection?
 * Good catch, corrected.

Lead

 * The lead is exceedingly short (two sentences). Increase it by adding info about the taxonomic history, description, and behaviour. Basically, anything in the article should have at least a brief mention in the lead.  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 02:48, 29 April 2016 (UTC)
 * No idea how I overlooked this, done.


 * Some parts of the lead are now a little over-specific now, and can be trimmed down a bit. For example, change "Baltic German naturalist" to "German naturalist" or even just "naturalist" and "Two moults can be observed in a year" can be "Moults can occur twice per year" or "Moults occur biannually"  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 19:39, 30 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Good idea, trimmed a bit.
 * remove "(typically five days long)", and you never mention threats or conservation efforts
 * Removed that, but I do mention threats and conservation efforts in the last para of the lead of every article I work on. It is a major part of the article. The lead is not too large for the article either, in my view. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 04:29, 2 May 2016 (UTC)


 * "Typically diurnal (active mainly during the day), the jungle cat hunts throughout the day" this is redundant
 * I want to say that hunting is the main activity throughout the day, perhaps I should remove "(active mainly during the day)"?
 * yes
 * Done. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 04:29, 2 May 2016 (UTC)


 * You keep putting the dependent clause first. Nothing wrong grammatically, it just reads weird after the second time (more-so here since the dependent clause is first in two consecutive sentences). Try using this once per paragraph
 * Working...
 * I have kept an instance in each para, as I remember one FAC where editors used a lot of this in the lead as it looked better to them. I don't know if it is really weird, but I personally like this style. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 04:29, 2 May 2016 (UTC)

General comments

 * I don't think you're supposed to wikilink country names
 * Perhaps not for common or obvious countries such as USA or UK. But I have linked countries in several articles of mine, and this article links a much fewer number than in others.


 * change "A member of the genus Felis, that consists of small cats..." to "A member of the genus Felis, which consists of small cats..."
 * Done


 * for "weighs 2–16 kilograms (4.4–35.3 lb)", I don't think the decimals places are necessary. If you're using template undefined undefined, add the parameter |sigfig=1. This is optional
 * I do this and find this done in few articles. If you think it would be useful, I can do this here.


 * You inconsistently use the serial comma (*comma* and)
 * Working...
 * Fixed many, but others are mainly to separate parts of the sentence, and not exactly the "A, B, and C" case (for instance, the comma in The cat is primarily a carnivore, and prefers small mammals is for clarity). I have seen this done often and have done this myself in many articles. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 04:42, 2 May 2016 (UTC)


 * reword "A 2014 study of albino jungle cats in the coastline tracts of the southern Western Ghats showed that, unlike true albinos that have red eyes, but this trait was not obvious in the observed animals"
 * Fixed.


 * reword "lighter in summer is than in winter"
 * Fixed.


 * "Typically diurnal (active mainly during the day), the jungle cat hunts throughout the day", redundant
 * Reply as in similar point above


 * "are taken as well" replace "taken" with "hunted" or "preyed upon" or some other synonym of those
 * Done


 * replace "32 km/h (20 mph)" with "at 32 km/h (20 mi/h)" or "at 32 kph (20 mph)"
 * I am using the convert template here, not sure how to change its wording as it may interfere with the syntax.
 * change km/h to kph
 * Doesn't seem to be working. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 04:42, 2 May 2016 (UTC)


 * wikilink "riparian"
 * Done


 * " Hence it is often known as the "reed cat" or the "swamp cat". Reeds and tall grasses are typical of its habitat", switch these sentences and/or merge them
 * Done


 * don't start a sentence with "but"
 * There was only one, fixed.