Talk:Justus Smith Stearns/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * J.S. Stearns --> J. S. Stearns
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:43, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * As "lumber baron" redirects to "business magnate", it's worth linking lumber in the lead to tell us specifically what he was into.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:51, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "He was involved" was also. Or ditch "other".
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:51, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Stearns, as a ..." sentence has lumber three times!
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:51, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "lumber baron" is linked twice in the lead.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:01, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Pine King in the lead and "Pine King" in the body.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:01, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "He was involved in..." you already said what he was involved in in the first para of the lead.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:01, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * You link Michigan in the lead but none of the other states.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "of a boating" in a boating accident.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "at around" at not needed for me.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "who had this tragic death at such an early age" unnecessary commentary.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * No need to link common words like "teen"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Miss Paulina Lyon" is "Miss" needed?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Pauline's" - Paulina?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Convert the miles for the people reading this who live in a metric world.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Setback is just a single word.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Several locations are overlinked: "Ludington, Michigan", ", Stearns, Kentucky", "Bagdad, Florida", "Odanah, Wisconsin", "Mason County, Michigan" etc.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " it had 30 men " employed.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Link board foot.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Pere Marquette Railroad." seems to be called Railway.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "one of the top businessmen" in what sense?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:40, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " Yamacraw and Oz." what are these?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:53, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "bankruptcy.[6][3]" order.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:53, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "banking interests in implementing new banking" repetitive.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Stearns built in 1902 the first all electric..." -> "In 1902, Stearns built the first all-electric...":
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Refs, no spaced hyphens, per MOS:DASH.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Check date formats are consistent in refs.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Page ranges also need dash not hyphen.
 * Not Done - don't know how to do. Can you help? Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:00, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Ref 10 should be "pages" not "page".
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * ISBNs should be consistently formatted.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)


 * His death and death date etc appear to be missing from the article prose.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

That's it for now, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 11:13, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. I'll get working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:24, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues addressed. One not done. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
 * FWIW - It so happens that Professor Nagle authored this book in 2015 based on the Wikipedia article I created in 2010 on Justus Smith Stearns. He told me he is working on another history book about Eber Brock Ward that he is basing off the Wikipedia article I have 91% authorship, that I did a 10 times expansion on 29 October 2010. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:40, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Happy with the article now so promoting to GA, good work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 12:00, 7 March 2021 (UTC)