Talk:Jyväskylä/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: EricEnfermero (talk · contribs) 07:39, 4 June 2013 (UTC)

I will be happy to review this article. I will read through it carefully and provide some initial feedback on the article in the next few days. Thanks in advance to the nominator. EricEnfermero Howdy! 07:39, 4 June 2013 (UTC)

I have completed an initial readthrough of the article. Currently, the article falls short of meeting the GA criteria. One option is to leave this review open for seven days and work very hard on the feedback below; after that, we can evaluate it again. The other option is to close the review for now, work on the article at a leisurely pace, then to nominate it again. That is your decision. Here is some initial feedback.

Prose
The grammar needs a bit of work, but we can do that when the rest of the problems are cleaned up. A bigger problem is that there are some very short sections or paragraphs. If those are merged or reorganized, I think that the flow of the article will improve. One example is the Name section. That could be included in the History section, I think.

Images
I checked each image in the article. Most are okay as far as copyright. There is one image, the first image of the university, where the copyright description is not clear to me. Another image, the one of the Neito statue, appears to be under a deletion discussion. In general, I think that there are too many images in the article. MOS:IMAGELOCATION advises not to sandwich text in between two images. That is probably beyond the scope of the GA criteria, but I think your article will read more easily if it is less cluttered.

Lead
Two of the paragraphs in the lead are underdeveloped. You might consider adding some brief economy information, since that's a fairly substantial section of the body.

Lists
In the Sports, Education and Culture sections, there are bulleted lists that might be better presented in prose (see WP:L). The non-notable sports teams can be removed from the list before converting it to a paragraph.

I have some minor feedback to add once these major issues are addressed. Thank you for the work that you have already completed on this one. EricEnfermero Howdy! 06:19, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

Closing this nomination now due to lack of response to feedback. It can be renominated if the nominator becomes active again.

Thank you for the opportunity to review material that was new to me. While the article doesn't meet the criteria right now, the "building blocks" are there for a future nomination. EricEnfermero Howdy! 17:22, 14 June 2013 (UTC)