Talk:Käre bröder, så låtom oss supa i frid/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:13, 29 April 2022 (UTC)

I will start this today and might finish in time! --K. Peake 09:13, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:26, 29 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change the writing date to simply 1770 since only dates/months should be noted next to years
 * Hmm. Done.


 * Cello is not sourced anywhere in the body
 * Removed.


 * Only one full-stop should be used at the end of the subtitle sentence, as this can act as closing punctuation when part of a title
 * Done.


 * Dancing and the gospel parts are unsourced
 * Edited.


 * "Its approach is" → "The composition's approach is"
 * Done.


 * Any more commentary to add here from reception/legacy?
 * Done.

Background

 * First para looks good!
 * Noted.


 * Wikilink drinking songs
 * Done.

Music and verse form

 * Add relevant text to the audio sample
 * Added.


 * "to be written." → "to be wrote." so the prose is less repetitive
 * Edited.


 * "It has the timbre" → "The composition has the timbre"
 * Done.


 * "each of fourteen lines." → "each consisting of 14 lines." per MOS:NUM
 * Done.

Lyrics

 * Only pipe to Solen glimmar blank och trind once on the img text
 * Hm, the image is a graphical index from the places to the epistles; and it's used in multiple epistle articles. If you're down at 17, Lilla Sjötullen, and you're faced with an unlinked "Ep. 48" and no other clues, that's pretty unhelpful. The links are small and not very conspicuous – they have to be small or the caption would spread far down the article – so we can't give the reader an index and then leave them hanging, arguing there's a link somewhere at the other end of the index! Therefore, I'd say the small amount of overlinking is necessary and justified.


 * Prose looks good!
 * Thanks!

Reception and legacy

 * "soon after the real watchmaker Jean Fredman's death" → "soon after the real Fredman's death" per this character already having been introduced in the body
 * Done.


 * Should you use "was intentionally" or "is intentionally" per the correct tense?
 * Changed.


 * Pipe to Conversion of Paul the Apostle should only be on dramatic conversation
 * Done.


 * "he wrote this first epistle he" → "he wrote his first epistle he"
 * The "this" seems entirely apposite here, the point is that it was this epistle, the subject of this article, that set the ball rolling. In another article we'd name it differently.


 * "another eighty of them:" → "another 80 of them:" per MOS:NUM
 * MOS:NUM says "Integers from zero to nine are spelled out in words.

Integers greater than nine expressible in one or two words may be expressed either in numerals or in words (16 or sixteen, 84 or eighty-four, 200 or two hundred). When written as words, numbers from 21 to 99 are hyphenated (including when part of a larger number): fifty-six or fifty-six thousand but five hundred or five thousand." This doesn't ask for writing these as numerals. Looking at the matter again, words for quantities of epistles are preferable to avoid confusion with epistle No. NN, so let's go for words, per MOS.
 * "but it was the start of" → "but marked was the start of"
 * Edited.


 * "more modern Swedish would have" → "more modern Swedish would have used"
 * Edited.


 * Last para looks good!
 * Thanks.


 * Pipe to Conversion of Paul the Apostle should only be on dramatic conversation for the img text
 * Done.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; nice job again! --K. Peake 20:59, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I briefly copyedited reception and legacy, also I understand the areas where you did not implement my suggestions! --K. Peake 07:00, 30 April 2022 (UTC)