Talk:König-class battleship/GA1

GA Review
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 * It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * Design: Would Tirpitz's pushing be fairly rendered as Tirpitz's ultimatum - think that'd read better.
 * Armament: You write ten 30.5 cm SK L/50 guns in five twin turrets here but ten 30.5 cm SK L/50 guns in 5 twin turrets in the intro. I think either can be justified according to MOS, five because it's less than 10, 5 to avoid any confusion with twin - however the rule should be applied consistently throughout.
 * Raid on Scarborough, Hartlepool and Whitby: Not sure of the rationale for digits in 2-hour long battle and 6 British dreadnoughts...
 * Operation Albion: In Along with several 9 light cruisers, 3 torpedo boat flotillas, and dozens of mine warfare ships, the entire force numbered some 300 ships, and were supported by over 100 aircraft and 6 zeppelins, were there 'several' or '9' light cruisers? Also I'd have thought we could use words for the single-digit numbers and digits for the big numbers...


 * It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * Fate: Last sentence of first para should have a citation, for completeness.


 * It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):


 * It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * a (fair representation): b (all significant views):


 * It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:


 * It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
 * a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales):


 * Overall:
 * a Pass/Fail:
 * Overall very good, very balanced and readable, just a few quite minor points to be addressed before passing it. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 10:43, 24 July 2009 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review, Ian. I've been thumped on the numbers thing before, I believe I was taught in school to use digits for every number in a sentence even if only one of them should be (i.e., a 2-digit number, etc.), but I keep forgetting that we do it differently here. It just looks a little odd to me to see "five, 23, one, three, 106" all in one sentence. Anyways, I fixed them and added the citation to the first para in "Fate." Also, I think "ultimatum" is a lot better; when I was writing that, I couldn't think of a good way to put it. Thanks again. Parsecboy (talk) 11:52, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * It all works for me - congrats on another GA pass! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:07, 24 July 2009 (UTC)