Talk:KVOA/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 21:06, 9 November 2023 (UTC)

I'll take this review. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 21:06, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Quite close already. Just a few copyedits and bits of context, and some possible images to add. Placing on hold so you have time to work. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 00:51, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Some sludge eluded me here, for sure. I think I was able to address every other issue and a redundant section I meant to remove, too! Should be ready for you to take a look. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 02:28, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
 * Looks good - happy to pass it. I would add the 39-hours-per-week tidbit to the news section so that it's not just in the lede (MOS:LEADREL is relevant), but that's not worth holding GA up over. Nice work. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 05:35, 10 November 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * I don't see a need for the age of the station; that only seems relevant for recent/ongoing events.
 * The lede is a bit thin. Maybe add a sentence about the news operation, and expand the history paragraph by 1-2 sentences?
 * Done. Their public file has a list of all their regular newscasts, so I was able to add an hours-a-week total which isn't always possible. I don't have a lot of info about their news op since, like, 2010, in the article, so this helps.

History

 * Is it possible to provide a sentence of context (eg Due to X and Y, the FCC placed a moratorium on new television stations from 19xx to 19yy) and/or wikilink to another article that covers that?
 * Might be worth clarifying that the radio stations applied for television channels.
 * Wikilink coaxial cable
 * The sentence beginning ABC programs moved... should probably be split in two.
 * Alvarado isn't mentioned until it's sold. Seems like it should be named in the previous paragraph.
 * The paragraph beginning In late June... is very short; perhaps merge it with the next paragraph.
 * Split the run-on sentence beginning The FCC approved in November 1972...
 * "golden age" is puffery (unless the sources specifically call it that) and should be replaced with more neutral wording.
 * Similarly, "particularly remarkable" needs to be replaced.
 * Another The station was acquired by H&C... - another that needs split
 * hard-core porn → hardcore pornography
 * This allowed KVOA to join...: This sentence is weirdly worded - "allowed" is not the right choice of word - and the mentions of the other stations aren't in the source. Given that the other incidents were 20 years prior, I think you can cut this sentence entirely.
 * Yeah, that sentence was a real leftover. And not a good one. This area needed a little more buffing.
 * Remove "Also" in the final sentence.

News operation

 * The first two paragraphs can be combined. (No change to the sentences needed.)
 * Remove comma after "Cox cable"

Other

 * Some free images from flickr that would be good to illustrate the article: news vehicle and Mount Bigelow antennas. (I think KVOA is the far right antenna.) I can transfer them from flickr if you need.

Overall

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: