Talk:Kamal Adwan

Extended-confirmed-protected edit request on 11 November 2017
Language is overly political, for example using "Mossad death squad" when the main article about the raid says it was committed by "Israel Defense Forces special forces units". Description of other people killed changed to language used in main article on the raid. Calling one a "charismatic poet and writer" and the other "a lawyer by profession" is a deliberate attempt to make them seem innocent. Information about Ghassan Kanafai's killing is completely irrelevant. Information about civilians and commandos killed in the raid, and the participants, is a level of detail bests left to the main article on the raid, which is linked in earlier in this article. In addition, a citation is needed for this sentence: "The killing of the three Palestinian leaders opened nearly twenty years of a tit for tat battle between the PLO and the Mossad all over the world."

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Kamal was killed in his flat in Beirut, in front of his wife, by a Mossad death squad on the 10th of April 1973. Both Kamal Nasser, a charismatic poet and writer, and Mohammad Abu-Youssef al Najjar, a lawyer by profession, were killed in the same attack. His killing came nine months after the murders of Ghassan Kanafani, a Palestinian novelist and a member of FPLP, and his 17-year-old niece, Lamees. An innocent 79 year old Italian women, living in the same building was also killed, as well as several Lebanese policemen. [11] Two of the attackers were killed by Palestinian defenders during their withdrawal.[12] The PLO claims that Ehud Barak, who was elected prime minister of Israel in the late nineties, was among the killers.[13]

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Kamal was killed in his flat in Beirut, in front of his wife, by IDF special forces on the 10th of April 1973. Both Kamal Nasser, a PLO spokesman and member of the PLO Executive Committee, and Muhammad Youssef al-Najjar, an operations leader in Black September, were killed in the same attack.[11] Ducnguyen63 (talk) 09:50, 11 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Red information icon with gradient background.svg Not done: please establish a consensus for this alteration before using the template. This is not minor edit &thinsp;&mdash; Ammarpad (talk) 11:24, 11 November 2017 (UTC)

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It seems to be page 158, not page 80. יעקב (talk) 08:55, 31 October 2023 (UTC)

Grammar correction
"The funeral of Adwan, Nasser and Al Najjar was attended by nearly half a million people most which were Lebanese."

SHOULD READ:

"The funerals of Adwan, Nasser and Al Najjar were attended by nearly half a million people, most of whom were Lebanese."

Thanks, Nirva20 (talk) 20:56, 8 February 2024 (UTC)