Talk:Kanche/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 16:39, 26 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "During the filming of Vedam (2010) in Vishakhapatnam, Krish visited a museum which displayed a bomb dropped by the Imperial Japanese Army on the city during World War II. " -do we know the museum?
 * No. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:23, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "Krish worked on the film's screenplay for nine-and-a-half months, " -and spent the other half month arguing with on wikipedia right? ;-)
 * Well, that didn't happen and i am happy for that. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:23, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * Google search engine -link?
 * Linked with Google Search. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:23, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "January 2015; Ramoji Rao was to produce the film under the banner Ushakiron Movies jointly with Krish's banner First Frame Entertainment.[4] Pragya Jaiswal, who auditioned for Gabbar Is Back, was signed as the film's female lead.[5] The film was officially launched on 27 February 2015 in Hyderabad and was titled Kanche.[6] Kanche translates to fence in English and Krish relates that the film focuses on the effects of a fence on friendship.[7] On the 75th anniversary of World War II, Krish told the Indo-Asian News Service on 1 September 2015" -I think you can avoid saying 2015 in the second two instances.
 * Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:27, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * ". Krish called Rao's cameo " -Krish described Rao's cameo as a colorful one?
 * Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:33, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "Razole, East Godavari district of Andhra Pradesh" -add "in" before East
 * Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:33, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "a 1940's tone." -try "in the 1940s style".
 * "The construction of the palace where Sitadevi lives took four to five days to complete and ₹4 million was spent" -try ", at a cost of ₹4 million" after "complete"
 * "The film's crew accepted the help of the Government of Georgia and huge sets were erected, which included a German military base camp. " -try "With the assistance of the Government of Georgia, huge sets were erected, including a German military base camp fitted with trenches and bunkers"
 * All of them, Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:43, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "Georgia, East Russia" -Georgia is not in Russia, it is an independent country!
 * Poor in Geography since childhood. :) Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:43, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "For the film's shoot, Krish hired a few telegraph machines, typewriters, and coffee cups and saucers manufactured during the timeline of the World War II.[18] Some key action sequences were filmed in a few old, dilapidated buildings located near Georgia and Varun Tej performed his stunts without a body double. " -this is poorly constructured, you'd making three different points at once. The whole section could probably do with some copyediting and shifting around to improve structure.
 * , Do you think the flow is better now? Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:47, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * " tabla tarang and sarod " -perhaps put what they are in brackets for non Indian readers
 * "The song "Itu Itu Ani Chitikelu Evvarivo" was composed using Natabhairavi raga; the song "Bhaga Bhagamani" was composed using Kamavardani raga; the song "Raa Mundadugeddam" was composed using both Charukesi and Kamavardani ragas.[27]" -can you find a way to reword and avoid repeating "composed"?
 * Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:22, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * In the release section you can avoid saying "2015" after first instance.
 * Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:22, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * " Devi Dundoo of The Hindu called Kanche a film that does not: "stand out merely by being different, but also because it’s earnest". Dundoo added: "Step across the fence to a new world of storytelling, [Krish] seems to say. He doesn’t do this like a fence sitter — wanting to push the envelope but holding back for box office acceptance — he just plunges in"." -awkward wording. I've reworded and shortened it.
 * Thanks for the help, ! :) Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:22, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "and praised Krish's choice of genre and stated: "" -avoiding repeating "and", trying changing to ", stating" after genre
 * Done. Rephrased the sentence. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:22, 28 February 2016 (UTC)


 * Box office section, can you avoid repeating the word "gross/ing a few times?♦ Dr. Blofeld  15:18, 28 February 2016 (UTC)
 * Reduced to four instances. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:27, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:

Though the structure in the production section in places might still be sharper this is very well written and meets the GA criteria. Good job!♦ Dr. Blofeld  16:41, 28 February 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, ! Pavanjandhyala (talk) 16:55, 28 February 2016 (UTC)