Talk:Kangana Ranaut/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 09:09, 2 June 2014 (UTC)

Will review within next three days.♦ Dr. Blofeld  09:15, 2 June 2014 (UTC)


 * Lede
 * "initially aspired to a career in medicine" -Initially aspired to become a doctor, or intended to pursue a career.
 * You might mention a few of her costars in some of the films like "opposite xx in.
 * " A comic role in the 2011 box office hit Tanu Weds Manu proved to be a turning point in her career, though this was followed by a series of brief, glamorous roles in films that failed to propel her career forward" -Doesn't make sense. She had already won major awards, I don't see how this was a major turning point if it was followed by those roles.


 * Early life
 * "She was initially inclined " -initially intended to become
 * A tad too much quoting I think, "During a screening, one of the male actors went missing; Ranaut who had been "observing the character from a distance and had an idea about the dialogues and body language" played the part along with her original role of a woman" particularly I think you should paraphrase.
 * "Ranaut struggled with her meager earnings during this period, eating only "bread and aachar (pickle)";[9] her father offered to contribute financially, but she refused, later remarking " -awkward phrasing, try: "Ranaut struggled with her meager earnings during this period, eating only "bread and aachar (pickle)". As she refused her father's financial assistance, it led to a rift in their relationship which she later regretted" or something like that.
 * "Her decision to act in films deteriorated her relationship with her relatives;[5] her parents were "horrified", thinking that she would be exploited, her grandfather asked her to drop her surname, and they didn't correspond with her for several years." -same here, try to rephrase.


 * Career
 * Life in a metro and Dhaam Dhoom really should have the years by them. I don't think then you need to later say "released in 2008". I always prefer it when you say "In 2008, xxx starred in xxx."
 * "was getting stereotyped " -becoming stereotyped
 * I think you could remove some of the sugary quotes like "sparkling little gem".


 * Personal life
 * "Ranaut has maintained a strong connect" -connection?
 * "she ever had, but decided on an amicable split as she wasn't ready for marriage" -she had ever had, and how can one "decide on an amicable split", it's surely both of their decisions. perhaps "the couple split amicably".


 * Media
 * "Analysing Ranaut's career, the journlaist" -typo


 * References
 * Can you bluelink Sify or delink it?♦ Dr. Blofeld  07:36, 5 June 2014 (UTC)
 * All done. Thanks for pointing out the errors. Much appreciated. :) -- KRIMUK  90  ✉  07:41, 5 June 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:

Certinaly adequate for GA but if you intend taking it to FA at some point I really think you need to cut back on the quotations, particularly the more sugary ones which aren't that informative, and paraphrase or remove a few to improve flow.♦ Dr. Blofeld  10:43, 5 June 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks a lot for the review Doctor! :) -- KRIMUK  90  ✉  10:52, 5 June 2014 (UTC)
 * Sorry, this is late, but thanks for the review, User:Dr. Blofeld! AB01  I'M A POTATO 11:32, 8 June 2014 (UTC)