Talk:Karl Wilhelm von Dieskau/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 05:58, 20 February 2017 (UTC)

Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 05:58, 20 February 2017 (UTC)


 * Lead and infobox;
 * Karl Wilhelm von Dieskau, (9 August 1701 in Kontoppe, part of the Prussian Neumark–14 August 1777 in Berlin); just the date range is enough, no need of geographical details done
 * Link lieutenant general done
 * Why "a campaign in Hungary" is separately mentioned? done
 * Section 1;
 * Period of his father, (16727–1762) is unnecessary, it is out of context I left his dates in
 * a daughter of I struck out "a" but it changes the meaning.  And the German was specific that she was a daughter, not the only daughter.
 * General Field Marshal? Is he a general or field marshal? Both of them are two different ranks, or it is a special case? Anyway, link whatever it is. fixed.
 * Section 2;
 * Dieskau entered the Prussian military -> Dieskau joined the Prussian military done
 * Link bombardier done
 * Comma after "On 12 April 1727"   done
 * he was raised to second lieutenant; I suggest "promoted" over "raised"  done
 * Dieskau's military career modeled that of other Junker sons. military career modeled that of other Junker sons; recheck the use of punctuation removed
 * The context on Junkers is a bit out of context, cut it down removed
 * Section 2.1;
 * Not only were there not enough guns, but "also" their quality was poor done
 * This made the gun unreliable -> This made their guns unreliable  done
 * Field Marshal Samuel von Schmettau done
 * What is "number artillery"? No. of units, the men, the guns or what? Make it clearer done
 * at which time the king had given him a magnificent tobacco pot -> and also the king had given him a magnificent tobacco pot at the same time done
 * Dieskau was appointed Lieutenant-Colonel -> Dieskau was promoted lieutenant colonel on; it is a rank not a position, one gets promoted not appointed done
 * 20 April 20 1755; check this  done
 * and on 28 February 1757,[5] finally colonel -> colonel on 28 February 1757
 * Link major general and lieutenant general  done
 * 3&dash;pound gun; check this correct   done  yes it is
 * Nothing about the Equestrian statue of Frederick the Great and Frederick the Great's vaunted artillery is mentioned in the prose. But it is in the lead, fix this. done
 * 0% confidence, well done.
 * No need to red link the writers in the sources if the articles are not there done
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 10:58, 4 March 2017 (UTC)


 * thank you! auntieruth (talk) 20:38, 6 March 2017 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 14:37, 8 March 2017 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 14:37, 8 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 14:37, 8 March 2017 (UTC)