Talk:Karma (Marina song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:33, 19 August 2020 (UTC)

Reunited once again; I will take this article on. --K. Peake 11:33, 19 August 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Remove formats from the infobox since they are no longer supposed to be used
 * Remove tropical as a genre since only the beat is tropical
 * WP:OVERLINK on Mark Ralph under producers
 * "The song was written by" → "It was written by" plus this should be swapped with the production sentence
 * "Ryan McMahon, Ryan Rabin, and her boyfriend Jack Patterson." → "Ryan McMahon, Patterson, and Ryan Rabin."
 * "Patterson produced the track" → "Marina's boyfriend Jack Patterson produced the song" since this will be the second sentence in the new order
 * "It was released for" → "The song was released for"
 * "as the album's fifth and final single in the United States" → "in the United States as the album's fifth and final single" with the appropriate target
 * "she wasn't initially aware of it." → "she was not initially aware of the inspiration."
 * "The track is a" → "It is a"
 * "beat and lyrics that describe" → "beat, which lyrically describes"
 * "it recalled her earlier works while others found it" → "the song recalled Marina's earlier works, while other critics found it"
 * "appears on Marina's sixth extended play," → "was released on Marina's sixth EP,"
 * "A music video using" → "A music video that uses"
 * "who dances in a studio space." → "who dances."
 * "The song was included on the setlist to" → "The original version was included on the setlist of"
 * "She also performed it live" → "Marina also performed the song"
 * "promotional appearance in the United States." → "promotional appearance in the US"

Background and release

 * "In order to proceed with a new era" → "For proceeding with a new era"
 * "in order to perform as just" → "in order to release music as just"
 * "She explained that to Dazed in January 2019:" → "She explained that,"
 * Why is Luis Fonsi mentioned here when he is not in the other articles with the same background?
 * "under her new name." → "under the new name."
 * "and an accompanying multi-leg concert tour." → "and first as Marina." since current info is irrelevant
 * "as the twelfth track overall and fourth on the Fear portion of the album." → "as the twelfth track on the album and the fourth on the Fear portion of it.
 * "Love + Fear is a" → "Conceptually, Love + Fear is a"
 * "experiencing these two emotions." → "experiencing the aforementioned two emotions."
 * "Ryan Rabin, and Marina's boyfriend Jack Patterson, of British group Clean Bandit." → "Ryan Rabin, and Patterson." plus this should be the sentence after the production one
 * "It was produced by Patterson and" → ""Karma" was produced by Marina's boyfriend Jack Patterson, of British group Clean Bandit, and"
 * "was first released on 26 April 2019, when the rest of Love + Fear was released to the public." → "was released on 26 April 2019, as the twelfth track on Marina's fourth studio album Love + Fear."
 * "For its release as a commercial single, it was sent to music distributor" → "For its release as a single, the song was sent to"
 * Was the release definitely digital download and streaming, since Spotify is a known streaming service?
 * "on 29 August 2019 through" → "on 29 August 2019, through"
 * "and featured on the track listing for her seventh extended play, Love + Fear (Acoustic) on" → "and featured as the third track on her seventh EP Love + Fear (Acoustic), released on"
 * "The new version was produced" → "The version was produced"

Composition and lyrics

 * "is a pop song with a" → "is a pop song, with a"
 * "accompanied by instruments" → "being accompanied by instruments"
 * "The original version of the song, stylistically," → "Stylistically, the original version of the song
 * "a great deal compared to the final edit;" → "a great deal in comparison to the final edit;"
 * "compared this version to catalogue" → "compared the original to the catalogue"
 * "behind each of the sixteen tracks" → "behind each of the 16 tracks"
 * "she revealed that" → "she stated that"
 * "with the" → "that came with the"
 * "She stated that" → "Marina said that"
 * "from a discussion Marina had had" → "from a discussion she previously had"
 * "falling from grace"." → "falling from grace.""
 * "Some music critics discussed how" → "Certain critical commentary discussed how"
 * "who stood up in defense" → "that stood up in defense"
 * "against American producer Dr. Luke;" → "against record producer Dr. Luke;"
 * "worked with Dr. Luke for her single" → "worked with him on her single"
 * Add release year of the single in brackets
 * "other songs that appear on her second studio album," → "other songs that are included on her second studio album"
 * "Further in her interview with Apple Music, she continued:" → "In her interview with Apple Music, Marina continued:"
 * "there’s really been" → "there's really been"
 * "didn’t really think" → "didn't really think"
 * "The lyrics to the song find" → "The lyrics of "Karma" see"
 * "think it's karma'"." → "think it's karma.'"" with the wikilink
 * "with the song," → "in the lyrics,"
 * "she felt with a common theme" → "she noted as a common theme"
 * Remove The Diamondback sentence per WP:RSSM

Critical reception

 * Maybe add more reviews if they exist?
 * "Marina’s lyrical assertiveness" → "Marina's lyrical assertiveness"
 * "not to be reckoned with"." → "not to be reckoned with.""
 * "speculated that the sound" → "commented that the sound"
 * "but claimed that her" → "but admitted that her"
 * "mean she’s not too" → "mean she's not too"
 * "damnably infectious"," → "damnably infectious,""
 * "fell flat compared to her" → "fell flat in comparison to Marina's"

Music video

 * "accompanied by two backup singers" → "while accompanied by two backup singers" on the img main text
 * "An official music video for "Karma" was" → "A music video for the acoustic version of "Karma" was" with the wikilink
 * "account on 25 September 2019." → "channel on 25 September 2019."
 * "the final of three released to promote" → "the final of three to be released for promoting"
 * "The clip for "Karma" depicts" → "The music video depicts"
 * "sparkly corset"." → "sparkly corset.""

Live performances

 * The first sentence should be removed as it lacks focus
 * "She appeared as a musical guest" → "Marina appeared as a musical guest"
 * "on 4 September of the same year," → "on 4 September 2019,
 * "in the accompanying music video." → "in the acoustic version's music video."
 * "consisted of Marina dancing" → "featured her dancing"
 * "the appearance on the show" → "Marina's appearance on the show"
 * "confidence and polish" and" → "confidence and polish," and"
 * "to have paid off"." → "to have paid off.""
 * Should you refer as "the concert" or "the tour"?
 * "of songs like 2015" → "of songs, including 2015"
 * "not disappoint"." → "not disappoint.""

Track listing

 * Good

Credits and personnel

 * Wikilink/target the musicians mentioned
 * Shouldn't engineer and assistant engineer be swapped in their order?

Release history

 * Remove the version column
 * Remove the April 2019 release as that was as part of the album
 * Are you sure digital download is a release format since that is from Spotify you are citing?

Final comments and verdict

 * after reviewing this over the day, do not feel to question me if you have any enquires and good work here from you! --K. Peake 18:48, 19 August 2020 (UTC)
 * been a week by now, any updates on this? --K. Peake 15:00, 26 August 2020 (UTC)
 * – my apologies. I am over halfway through your comments. Could I have one more day to complete making any changes? Carbrera (talk) 18:48, 26 August 2020 (UTC).
 * – In regards to why Luis Fonsi is included here and not elsewhere is simply a little goof on my end. "Baby" is Clean Bandit's song that features both Marina and Fonsi. I will update the other articles accordingly to mention both musicians. And as for more critical reviews of "Karma", I am afraid I could not find anymore. Other than that, I believe I addressed all of your comments. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Thanks for your patience, Carbrera (talk) 11:16, 28 August 2020 (UTC).
 * This is looking nice, though you did not fix the issue with introducing Patterson in the opening section of the body. --K. Peake 13:20, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
 * – How's it looking now? Carbrera (talk) 07:24, 29 August 2020 (UTC).
 * You are supposed to mention in the production sentence that he is "of Clean Bandit". --K. Peake 08:13, 29 August 2020 (UTC)
 * – Fixed it. Carbrera (talk) 18:58, 29 August 2020 (UTC).
 * You placed the info in the wrong area but I fixed that for you, article can now ✅! --K. Peake 07:02, 30 August 2020 (UTC)