Talk:Kat (Gravity Rush)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 03:17, 25 February 2023 (UTC)

Looks interesting! I will review this later today (my time zone is UTC).  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 03:17, 25 February 2023 (UTC)
 * That should be all! I have placed this on hold for now and left some comments below. Please ping me once you have addressed my concerns otherwise I may not respond. Thanks,  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 23:03, 25 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good to go! Nice work on the Ark of Time addition as well. I am now happy to pass this article for GA status per the changes implemented. Congrats on the fantastic article!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 18:19, 27 February 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check
Earwig says good to go. Quotations are used in-line with WP:COPYQUOTE.

File
The image is relevant, appropriate and copyright-free:
 * : valid public domain rationale; downscaled image.

Prose

 * Add the abbreviation for downloadable content in parentheses so "In that game's DLC chapter" makes sense for readers unfamiliar with thr abbreviation.


 * Does PlayStation Matsuri have to have quotation marks?


 * Is her love of food prominently noted or referenced throughout one or both of the games she is in? Otherwise I do not see it as particularly noteworthy.


 * "they create Gryps or Sphinx, a far larger guardian with immense power, depending on who initiates the transformation, Kat or Raven." – does Kat create Gryps and Raven Sphinx? If so, end the sentence with "respectively." to better indicate this.
 * ✅ - Although I rephrased it more.


 * Wikilink amnesia in § Appearances.
 * - Linked in lede already.
 * Pages are linked twice in an article—once for their first mention in the lede and first mention in the body of an article. I went ahead and wikilinked it since this is only a small change.


 * "with a new mysterious enemy." – any more elaboration on this?
 * ✅ - Did a rewrite of a lot of the plot summary


 * "Climbing the World Pillar, she discovers" – recommend "Kat discovers" as she is used quite a few times in the previous sentence.
 * ✅ - See above


 * "but she is hinted at being alive in the ending" how about "but is hinted as being alive." Relatedly:
 * "in the ending" – the end credits/an end scene?
 * ✅ - See above


 * "as a playable downloadable content character" – DLC character would work here per my comments above.


 * "similar to how Kat "falls" through" – does falls need quotation marks here?
 * - This is meant to indicate that while Kat is technically falling, it's not completely uncontrolled. But if you have a better idea, tell me.
 * Ah, I see. Hmm not sure honestly.


 * "better-received." – I do not think the hyphen is needed here, but I could be incorrect.


 * I would wikilink Western to Western world.


 * "found characters who react realistically to the situation relatable" – recommend "found characters who react realistically to situations relatable"? Or, was this during beta testing etc.?


 * "Twinfinite called Kat" – should also mention the article author.

Refs
Passes spotcheck on refs 2, 7, 12, 14, 19 and 24. Nice work.

Other
Section formatting, nav, other templates and cats good.


 * Add a short description.


 * Recommend adding template:use X English.


 * Please add WP:ALT text to the image if you do not mind.

I have made most suggested changes, please tell me if there is anything more necessary. ᴢxᴄᴠʙɴᴍ (ᴛ) 07:03, 27 February 2023 (UTC)