Talk:Kathy Dunderdale/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 20:23, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

Hello! I will be reviewing this article for potential GA status. My review should be posted shortly. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 20:23, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
 * I've decided to place this article on hold to allow time for the below concerns to be addressed. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

the province, Dunderdale was sworn in as his successor" - unnecessary repetition in lead. There are several examples of repetitive phrasings throughout the article -
 * Writing and formatting:
 * Don't use contractions
 * "She was sworn in as premier on December 3, 2010 after the resignation of Danny Williams...When Williams resigned as premier of
 * "She was sworn in as premier on December 3, 2010 after the resignation of Danny Williams...When Williams resigned as premier of
 * "the Status of Women" - is this an organization? Can you briefly explain its function?
 * Spell out "%" in article text, spell out numbers under 10
 * Avoid one-sentence paragraphs where possible
 * Avoid one-sentence paragraphs where possible
 * Avoid one-sentence paragraphs where possible


 * Specify on first occurrence that the currency being used is C$
 * "She appointed Innovation, Trade and Rural Development Minister Shawn Skinner as her successor, she made several other changes but did not appoint a Deputy Premier" - grammar
 * Need more hyphens
 * Need more hyphens
 * Need more hyphens

I think I cleaified it
 * "14 doctors announced their resignations...the 13 doctors who tendered their resignations" - what happened to the other doctor?
 * "the premier’s office announced that due to a couple of incidents since Dunderdale became premier in December that police bodyguards had been assigned to her" - grammar
 * "The NTV/Telelink poll..." - this paragraph is very difficult to read, can it be reworded or summarized more clearly?
 * "The NTV/Telelink poll..." - this paragraph is very difficult to read, can it be reworded or summarized more clearly?
 * "The NTV/Telelink poll..." - this paragraph is very difficult to read, can it be reworded or summarized more clearly?

Don't understand this?
 * Accuracy and verifiability:
 * Footnotes for electoral tables can appear within the table itself, usually after the title
 * All web sources need publisher and retrieval date
 * Date formatting should be more consistent
 * Date formatting should be more consistent
 * Date formatting should be more consistent
 * What makes this a reliable source?  - I don't know why it's not?
 * Digital Journal is a participatory-journalism site, "a social news site powered by people just like you. Made up of professional journalists, citizen journalists, bloggers, passionate writers and regular Joes and Janes". If anyone can contribute, you can't be sure of the reliability of the source - that's part of the reason we don't cite wikis. However, this piece has a named author - if you can verify that author's credentials, then you can safely use this source.
 * There was nothing different in that article then others I had so I just replaced it.
 * Broad:
 * When did she marry? When were her children born?
 * "Dunderdale was elected to the Burin town council and served as deputy mayor" - when? In general, be more specific about the timeline
 * "the rules committee upheld the previous ruling by the credentials committee" - you didn't actually say that the previous ruling was made by the credentials committee


 * Neutrality:
 * Some phrasings could be less colloquial
 * Keep in mind that as a biography of a living person neutrality standards are higher for this article than for most
 * "she negotiated and signed several major development deals which will add billions of dollars to the provincial coffers" - which will? Unless you can predict the future, be more vague and politician-like ;-)

No issues noted
 * Stability:

Article has no images - no issues
 * Images:

Looking much better. There's still some work to be done, but I think it's now good enough for GA status. I encourage you to keep working to improve the article. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:13, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Fixed some of the issues and I'm looking at some others. Sadly I don't think I will be able to get enough ditailed information on her at this time for this to make this a GA article. Newfoundlander&amp;Labradorian (talk) 22:34, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Woohooo! I plan on updating the article regularly and using a similar format as Ed Stelmach's article. She's only been premier 3 months so there's still not much written on her, hopefully with this been an election year we will see more biography stories on her. Newfoundlander&amp;Labradorian (talk) 15:22, 15 March 2011 (UTC)