Talk:Kato Svanidze/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:18, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! Will review this. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 15:18, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Added all my comments: Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 07:17, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * As per WP:MOSLEAD too many pronunciations should not be kept in the lead. Keep just one, others can go to the infobox.
 * Can the lead be expanded so that it covers all parts of the article?

Early life

 * Don't make too many paras, it appears choppy. Please combine parts.
 * "Rachelian."  "Rachelian".

Early life in Tiflis

 * Source for the first and second paras?
 * This section is also bitty.

Marriage to Stalin

 * Appears choppy.
 * Stalin (known as "Soso" to his Georgian friends) and Kato were very much in love. Why is this included here? Seems unnecessary.
 * Stalin later told his youngest child, daughter Svetlana Alliluyeva Would be good to mention that she came from his second marriage.
 *  A few months later authorities made the connection; an Okhrana raid on a Bolshevik residence in Moscow revealed a paper with their address on Freylinskaya Street and the message, "seamstress Svanidze, ask for Soso." Source?

Illness and death

 * and wrote her and Stalin Should it not be "wrote to"?

Family

 * Duplink: Svetlana Alliluyeva
 * You should clearly state that Maria Anisimovna Korona is Mariko.
 * Soviet law required the divorce decree to printed in the newspaper along with their home addresses "to be printed". By the way, I don't see why this part needs to be included.
 * Source for the 3rd para?

This should be all. These addressed, I would be happy to promote this. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 07:17, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

You there? Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 13:45, 5 April 2016 (UTC)


 * Hi thanks for your time on this. I will work on improvements! Thank you so much!   —Мандичка YO 😜 22:25, 5 April 2016 (UTC)


 * You there? If there is no response by 12th this month (a week since the last response) I will have to fail this nomination. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 13:27, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Hi Yes, I'm so sorry, I have not had a chance to get to this. I will do it tonight! Thank you for the reminder and your help with my first GA!!!  —Мандичка YO 😜 14:51, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks. You have done really well in your first GA, I could notice only a handful of issues! Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 14:56, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
 * and, with no edits to this page in 9 days, and none to the article since before the review began, where does this stand? Display name 99 (talk) 22:00, 19 April 2016 (UTC)
 * , I have been busy elsewhere. I am afraid this review can not wait anymore. I must fail this after all the delay. I would like to set it renominated after the above issues have been fixed. I would request the nominator to be faster in their response, the review can not remain open for long without any activity.  Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 04:18, 20 April 2016 (UTC)